"I love you. Will you marry me? I know we just met and everything, but any girl who'd pick that over The Notebook is definitely worth marrying. Isn't she?" Ah, Jordan how could she say no to you when you use charming lines like that? I loved this chapter Jordan really is a goofball. After knowing Jordan less than a day she's thinking about getting a restraining order against him. But, he's willing to go all out with Elvis and Vegas, not sure how she can say no to that. Definitely loved the update very cute and funny. Can't wait for the next chapter.
I like this this story so far. The tagline is really what got me interested in it. Cute story so far, now I'm curious as to what movies they were arguing over and what they ended up watching. I like the little mentions of New Zealand since, that's where your character is from. I'm not very cultured when it comes to New Zealand, did know about the kiwi and the rugby being big there though. Hope you can update soon. Please.
well I feel like a jerk for not commenting more...its not cause of you, I'm just like that! (P.S- I'm trying to get the lettering better, sorry if I hurt your eyes too) Seriously my friend said if a squirrel jumped in the road and got hit, I would feel guilty for not stopping a freaking rabid squirrel lol!
Well anyway, I like the story as I said before because its the traditional teen girl life, but its worked on. You actually do research and try to make your story relevant, not just crap. You work on it, make it seem real and give little quirks and background info for your characters, its a good habit. I've been writing for several years so I would know.
(But I suggest if you are ever going to get published, don't put it on a website! I never put my professional work on here, most of these stories are just spur of the moment, ways for me to get out my emotions in the day. Different emotions for different stories, but an overall theme? Get it...or am I being crazy...
Oh well..well hope you update soon...Read my new story called My Song (I'M OPEN TO NAME SUGGESTIONS!!!????)
I DON'T KNOW, BUT I FREAKING WANT TO KNOW, SO GET ON YOUR COMPUTER AND WRITE SOME MORE. I updated TWO stories, so that equals two updates for you too! OH YEAH. I have honestly never heard of Maori, but now that I have, I feel a little more cultured. Oh, and if I haven't mentioned it yet, I freaking love that summary/tagline thing with the 'flightless birds should stick together'. It's so cute and heartwarming. <3 More more more more more!
Hmm, I liked this story cause its different, and its kinda weird. (IN THE GOOD WAY!) I honestly am no...long distance sports, I like Steelers football, which is in Pittsburg, the same city as the Pittsburg Penguins, so I guess we can agree semi if you actually like them? I liked how you knew the background info, even if you don't watch hokey. So please update, hope my comment semi complimented you ha ha. Ok well...bye?!