Okay, so this story is so freakin' adorable! I only have time to read the few first chapters, but you guys definitely have a new subbie here (: I was captivated the second I read the first few words; it's so cute! Even though he was a jerk when he was young, Storm is such a cutie :D I'm really excited to see what happens next. I'm subbing :D <3
The layout is beautiful. Like, seriously. It wasn’t even plugged in. They're probably planning on shipping it off soon.
What the hell. I’m a growing boy, I need to eat!--this part made me chuckle. I really thought that first chapter was a good start. This isn't something I'd read, but I still liked it. Nicely done <3
This is good. It's original, and I love the banner.
The summary broke my heart.
In the story itself, there are spelling mistakes, which you could fix easily I'm sure if you looked. But it does kind of bug me.
but my dad toke a new job and he’s been talking about it all week You mean "took" I'm sure. ^_^ You need to put commas after some things, too. Look out for that.
Awwwwe... I love how they despite each other... uh, the love, the love... The story's great.. so as your writing! haha, most of the story I was laughing my ass off Ha, here's for you!Get that!Muhahaa, someone's in tro-uble.. yeah.. Well, when Camilla will fight back? I can't wait to see what she has in plan for him... x [watch out, Storm!]
Please say she has a beautiful voice anf he's gonna hear her sing, ugh! please! please!