November 12th, 2010 at 12:34am
This was very well written. You have a lot of characters and it is hard to describe what all of them are doing, but you seem to have a talent for it. I really like the names you've chosen, too. Especially Lottie.
I've heard it before, but I'm not sure from what... Anywho, you have a wonderful story here. The only thing that threw me off a bit was the layout. Other than that, this was amazing.
Also, I love the descriptions in the first chapter. Some people aren't very good with settings and descriptions, but you have a great knack for that :]
You have a wonderful story here. Great job!