The Fake Bride - Comments

Lovely as always. I like your writing style. Show but not tell.

Amazing job. I hope you write soon.

This chapter was really sad. If it was sad for me to read, I couldn't imagine how it was for you to write. The tension in the princess' bedroom was quite chilling. It was chilling because it felt so real, and as cliche as this sounds, I felt like I was there, watching in the shadows. Even though she is a character, I really admire Trinity for attempting to be strong in front of others especially after her best friend hit her and basically threw her away. Oh, I really do hope the two make up.

Aw, that is such sad news. But I really like the argument between everyone and the King. They argued against him even though whatever they say won't be at all considered by the king since he has the final word. But I find it rather sad that the princess dismissed Trinity.

Great chapter!!

Read the thrid chapter today and it was ah-mazing! I love this story! I did not read the first version but I cannot imagine it better than this! Please update soon! Its really good and beyond amazing, more amazing books and stories I have ever read in my life!

Have I told you how much I adore this version of the story? Even though I did like the original version, I love this version a lot better. Everything seems more realistic than the other version. And the details are just amazing, well they were as amazing in the first version, but still.

I really don't remember Detles at all. I guess it is because I read the chapter he is was such a long time ago. How sad it that? I don't remember... Oh, well. Anyway, I really love the third chapter.

This is by far... the most amazing story I have seen on here yet! Keep up the good work :)

This is a great story!
I really like it.
You're a really expressive writer.

The tittle caught my eyes and I checked it out and this story is awesome! Continue?
Subscribed! :D

I totally agree with he comment above. This story is really interesting and I love your descriptions of scenery, animal behaviour, and friendship. You mention the possibly of their friendship missing something missing in the friendship... I think it's fine ;D

As for the rival, she irks me, but hey, it makes the story all that more interesting. I'm curious of what role Lenora will play later on.

As a little side note, I'd rather wait a bit longer for well written updated instead of rushed ones. Other than that, keep up the awesome work :D!

I love that you are rewriting this. I adored the first version, but I can only guess that this version is going to be ten times better! And I do love the new layout; it is beautiful, elegant and fits the story well.

In the first chapter, I like the encounter with the horses, and how you put in Trinity's fear of them and the princess' opinion of the creatures that Trinity dislikes. I also like the scene where the two wish each other a happy birthday. I just thought it was one of the sweetest things that I have ever read. But I have always wondering what Trinity's name was before the princess renamed her... It is just a mystery to me.

Oo, Lenora annoys me but I guess that Trinity has to have a rival somewhere. And I remember the Earl! The two make such a cute couple! Oh, I have never been so excited to read a story in all of my life; this story is probably my favorite story on mibba.

Bedsides the little mattress that she was sitting on, she only owned a desk, topped with ordinary accessories like her hair brush, hair pins, and strips of ribbons.
I found a small mistake in this sentence at the beginning of chapter one. Bedsides should be besides.

Anyway, I love this story and I do hope you update soon. But I am not forcing you to update; write and update when you can. :D

Ah, I'm glad you're re-writing this because I thought you dropped this story xD Love the first chapter.

Ah! I never got to read the old version, but this one is quite lovely! It makes me want to speak in a dignified manner, yes?

Haha! I really do love it though. :3

I absolutely love this story:) I really want you to update!!

Oh my, I love this(:

You have a very nice writing style.

Lovelyyy! <3

There are some spelling/grammatical mistakes but overall it's very original and nice word choice xD You must update soon or quite a lot of people will start spamming you :3

Nice chapter really cute :)

Very long nice chapter

Finally, you have written a new chapter. I love the awkwardness between Trinity and Prince Fayre. I don't know if I have said that before, but if I have, then I say it again.

There are only a few periods missing sort of at the ending the chapter twelve, but those are the only mistakes I found. I just have one question: who is Clara? Prince Fayre mentions her to Juriel toward the ending, and I just cannot recall who she is.

Anyone, I love the update, and I cannot wait to see what's next!