February 22nd, 2010 at 02:39pm
One thing I must point out.
Jonah is definitely a looker.
Like, I just had to say that...xD
Ahem. ANYways...>.>
:(
The ending was kinda depressing, but it was SO...
....
cute. ^.^
It was really really adorable. :)
I loved it. <3
:D
Amazing job!<3
xo
NO. 'Tis so sad. Seriously! What's up with the pants-fetish, man? Bleh, stupid Jonah. >O
Haha, ignore my nonsense. Anyway, it was a bit grammatically incorrect at parts, - by that I mean your present and past tenses got mixed up - but other than that it was alright. x]
I didn't know such a disorder existed - I thought that was just social phobia. Well anyway, that was a lovely read. It wasn't draggy, and I like how it didn't end all cliche, but instead Cameron actually had the guts to push Jonah away. And, well, Cameron's so cute. :3
Good luck for the contest! ^^