Good job! (here are two tips: don't put ahhh!! or two exlamation points when you write. Say, 'she/he screamed loudly and then also if you make the selection between the paragraphs bigger, then it's easier to read. ;]) Please update soon!
its weird to read about matt sanders being so violent coz hes like a big teddy bear but ive never read a story like this before and i'm officially hooked (: keep going!!! <3 ive subscribed and will continue to comment (:
I agree with MusicMadness, and being reported is horrible. All you need to do is re-read your work and stuff. Ask people to check it for you..that's what I do. I do really like this.
It's...better... you are making it way too short though. Try to explain why they are friends, or what her house looks like. DESCRIBE THINGS! Seriously, a reporter is going to report this story. <XP please message me...
I really like this idea, but you have a tonnnn of grammar mistakes. Just wanted to say that before a reporter got to you... I'll happily edit it for you! just message me.
haha. yea, this'll take a while since im basically rewriting what i have already written and i just got back from a field trip like an hour ago. haha. so i'll try to update whenever i can.