November 17th, 2014 at 08:35pm
P.S. Please Write Back - Comments
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Dear author, I read the whole thing and I noticed something. John wasn't in love with Sterling and after their fight, it was too soon for them to get back together seeing as Sterling was the first man he had sex with. You made John come out of the closet too soon and you also turned the relationship the four guys started to polygamous relationship too soon. After Gregory took James in the toilet at school, it gave off the feeling that James was obsessed with Sterling, plus John was interested only on Sterling. At those three parts you have to add more details and explain things through out the chapters. Other than that and a few writing mistakes here and there I enjoyed reading this. The first thirty chapters had a pretty flow going on and were written better than the rest. I give you eight out of ten pens for this slash story of yours. ~Marian.February 14th, 2013 at 12:25pm
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Dear author, I read the whole thing and I noticed something. John wasn't in love with Sterling and after their fight, it was too soon for them to get back together seeing as Sterling was the first man he had sex with. You made John come out of the closet too soon and you also turned the relationship the four guys started to polygamous relationship too soon. After Gregory took James in the toilet at school, it gave off the feeling that James was obsessed with Sterling, plus John was interested only on Sterling. At those three parts you have to add more details and explain things through out the chapters. Other than that and a few writing mistakes here and there I enjoyed reading this. The first thirty chapters had a pretty flow going on and were written better than the rest. I give you eight out of ten pens for this slash story of yours. ~Marian.February 14th, 2013 at 12:25pm
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So im going over old notifications for stories and so far this has been like 1/25+ that has been completed!!!! Most are just left:/
I will come back and read all of this again because i loved it:)January 15th, 2012 at 05:45am -
More!!!
Sho cute:)July 1st, 2011 at 10:42pm -
omg, love it! it didn't suck... it was better than anything I coulda done... LOL, keep em comin....July 1st, 2011 at 08:03pm
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really good, I loved it...I've missed this storyJuly 1st, 2011 at 03:00pm
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loved itApril 24th, 2011 at 04:01am
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This story is soo interesting, I love how its different from a lot of other stories :)April 24th, 2011 at 01:00am
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That's really cute that their teacher is so close to them. And aww, his partner was adorable.
Ahahahaha, they're too funny. James is quite something.
Poor Andy, feel better baby. :)March 23rd, 2011 at 07:28pm -
really good, can't wait for more(use to be BisexualAngel)March 23rd, 2011 at 03:55pm
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Awww poor Andy :(March 23rd, 2011 at 04:35am
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Woo-hoo updateMarch 23rd, 2011 at 03:27am
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WOOT.
Loved this chapter. Hope nothing is horribly wrong with Andy.February 14th, 2011 at 11:04pm -
Awww :) they are all so good together, i love this story so much :DFebruary 12th, 2011 at 10:02am
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Awww. Poor Andy :(February 12th, 2011 at 07:48am
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aww poor baby that sucks but good i love this cant wait for moreFebruary 12th, 2011 at 07:32am
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ohhh. :( poor baby. Hopefully he feels better.
And oh my goodness he's adorable!! AHH!! i love him! <3!! :DFebruary 12th, 2011 at 06:16am -
aww that poor babyFebruary 12th, 2011 at 05:34am
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I love this story, i just sat down and read all 52 chapters in one sitting, more please :DJanuary 27th, 2011 at 08:11am
I believe this is one that I didn't finis because of the frequent occurrence of "in till" instead of until.
And looking at these comments I'm guessing only a few people tried to call you out on it but never gave specifics. Well that's a specific.
I also agreed that it was rushed but that doesn't matter now since it's been more than a few years. I was searching for completed stories and it was around 1-2 years old when I came across it.