Blanket - Comments

I know this is your first one shot and it's kinda old but this is a beautiful poem, EverRose! I loved and it displays a lot of emotions. And for some reason, as random as this is going to sound, it makes me think of an old blanket I had while growing up. :)

Beautifully done <3

Very good.
It's not focusing on the abuse or the dying it's about a girl and her blanket, about feeling safe, and that's not something that usually on mibba.

Very good. I think Ill read some more of your stuff.

very cute :D i love it
it kind of reminds me of a little stuffed animal I have, I feel safe when I hold it hahaha kind of childish i know but it reminds me of my mom :)
all in all i loved this and I like the layout too :D

This was amazing.
It felt real, y'know.
I always carried around a blanket with me.
Haha. I wish this wasn't a oneshot. :D

This was good. It was kind of lyrical, though the only way I'd say it could be more so would be by using the word "blanket" less, but that's a nit-picky and unnecessary detail. You could also expand on the relationships more, but don't get me wrong- this is absolutely fabulous as it is. Very nice work. :)

You know when I'm under my blanket, I honestly feel safer for some reason.
This made me think about the past when I would hide under my blanket if I heard a sound and got scared, and when I was under the blanket I was just safe.

This was cute, I really liked it a lot (:
Like everyone else has said, beautiful.

You know when I'm under my blanket, I honestly feel safer for some reason.
This made me think about the past when I would hide under my blanket if I heard a sound and got scared, and when I was under the blanket I was just safe.

This was cute, I really liked it a lot (:
Like everyone else has said, beautiful.

I come home and lay on my bed. I pull my blanket over my head. - Did you notice that rhymed ?
I like that the opening line rhymes.

This was an excellent one-shot.
I loved the concept of the blanket.

It was relateable to me in a way because when I am wrapped up in my blanket I feel a comfort. This was a simple idea made beautiful.

(:

This story is so sweet and comforting. I remember when I was younger how I always kept a blanket with me. =) I love how the blanket has such meaning to her and how it is her home. This a an amazing story. And, yes, it reminds me of a poem but with much more awesomeness. <3

I wish I could come up with something besides 'cute' or 'awesome' but those really are the only words that came to mind when I read this story. (:

Cute because who doesn't love a good blanket story?
And Awesome because even though it's a tragic seeming story,
you made it sound amazing. (:

Fabulous Job.

Aw. <3
It did sound quite like a poem - the beginning, at least, and the rest was just amazing.

Yeah, I really enjoyed the concepts behind this.
It was comforting, and there were some really good lines. Grammar error:
"I pray that I well live but things only seem to get worse."

Well, I think that the idea was good, but that you didn't follow through. My english teacher always says show more than you tell. Which basically means that you want to try to describe things more than you say what it is, and it feels like you're trying to tell things rather than describe them.

I didn't get much depth from the character so I wasn't really attatched to her, it was more of a: Well this is who I am, I live here, this is what's going on in my life, and this this and this happened to me. Where as you could have given the character more depth if you broadened the vocabulary of this piece.

I like the way that you took the part about a blanket and tried to bring childhood memories and fears into her life now, but it didn't translate as well as I think you thought it did. Overall, it was a good idea, but it didn't transfer well with it's emotions and description.

This was kinda cool. It's something different. It is a bit like a poem, but I can also see how it's a story, too.

This was pretty good.
I agree with everyone above me.
It's cute to read about a blanket, I carried one around with me everywhere until I was eight, haha.
Good job with this and yeah it is kind a like a poem.
Haha.

Pretty much what they all said up there. It was beautiful, and I liked it very much. Awesome job!

Haha, this is cute.
I love that it's about a blanket.
What would make it even better, if it was about a snuggie.
o.O

This is wonderful. And haha, yeah, it feels like a poem but it's more. (: I just love it.

:( I love this.
I don't really have anything else to say aside from that.
I just wanted to say that it would look better if you seperated your paragraphs.

Also, I don't think that alive should be capitilized in the last sentence. I understand you want to make it stick out and be more meaningful. Maybe italicize it?