My thoughts on the fight isn't all that bad. I expected harsher insults, colder expressions and less screaming. I also think this should be the last final chapter and you should get the back together in the sequal. Well anyway, it's greatly written and I loved it since I read the first chapter(:
I think, if a sequel were to ensue, Darcy should get back into the swing of her old life and old friends and habits, etc. Then, after a few months or so, you-know-who tracks her down, yada yada... But that's just my imput:) I love this story, but I feel like it needs to end in tragedy...(: The kind that'll make me cry and brood for days.
ok DANG they need to be together in the end though they both said some harsh stuff but when push comes to shove they still love each other and always will :/ oo btw I love your other story where the girl loses her memory as well :)
Teehee I love when people start new pages. My idea for the sequel might be different then your idea guys -.- Very different If anyone wants to help, message me =]
I know you said this wasn't the end, but personaly I think you should end it here and do a sequel. That would be great. I think this is the climax, and a perfect place to add suspence by starting and new story. You don't have to listen to me I just think that would be great.
Love the story! Upload though I wanna know wat happens next. I just want someone to punch Jesse, I actually want Darcy to punch him tht would be epic :) I can really picture tht lol.
For people who have figured it out that I post here when I have something to say:
I wrote the next chapter. The whole thing. But I'm doing extreme editing because I want it to have the right amount of panic from Darcy, anger from Rayden, and the chaos that her life is falling apart.
Granted it could have none of that at all, but at least I'm trying, right?
Anyway, just thought I'd let you all know that im not procrastinating. I'm also trying to get out the first chapter to a brand new story, which should be equally as good as Stripper, maybe even better? I Hope you'll all read it. Until then, please know I'm thrilled with my comments! We have exactly ten more comments then subscribers (Well eleven once I post this). But we can do better! Keep commenting =] next chapter up soon!
I'm addicted to your stories<3 I think that it's best to keep it in Darcy's or Rayden's POVs because they're, of course, the most interesting characters. I'm really looking forward to your next update, so take your time and make it awesome !:)