California Storms - Comments

  • lostwithoutyou.

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    I think this is the saddes thing I have ever read :(
    Very good <3
    June 8th, 2011 at 02:07pm
  • Serena.

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    So...beautiful. :')
    Something about that story just touched my heart <3
    November 16th, 2010 at 10:00am
  • november rain;

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    oh, wow...
    that was amazing.
    i can't even begin to describe how great that was. x.x
    i loved every bit of it.

    good luck in those contests - i'm sure you'll win. :3
    June 6th, 2010 at 07:34am
  • strigoi.

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    This was soooo very cute and so very sad. It reminded me of the music video for All These Things I Hate by Bullet for My Valentine. So freaking sadddd. But I enjoyed it so much.
    Thanks sooo much for entering this in my contest.
    I'll let you know when the judging period is over and the winners are announced.
    May 24th, 2010 at 10:44pm
  • nicholas joseph;

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    -Cries-
    I....really liked this.
    Like...a lot.
    It was really said, and sweet<3
    You did a really good job(:
    I'm glad it wasn't all clichéd.
    I get tired of those<3
    Anwaysss.
    Good luck<3
    xo
    May 11th, 2010 at 10:57pm
  • watermelon smiles.

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    Oh my god. This was so heartbreaking and so incredibly sweet all at the same time.
    I loved how you set it up at the beginning, with things being kind of vague and then as the story progresses we [the readers] discover what actually happened.
    I always like a little mystery in my stories.
    I absolutely adored their kiss scene. It was so cute.
    At the end, when Vince was going to get groceries, I was basically shouting at the screen "NO! Don't go!"
    I just knew you were gonna kill him off, and the way you wrote it was simply lovely.
    Your spelling and grammar were impeccable, which I liked a lot.
    And you set this story in California, where I live. It makes me happy.

    Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck :D
    May 11th, 2010 at 06:06am
  • Cadet_Griggs

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    That was really amazing! It was perfectly structured : )
    May 8th, 2010 at 06:08am
  • ImmaEnforcer

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    Oh my god. This is so beautiful and yet so sad! You write very well, you captured moments perfectly. Don't let anyone tell you this isn't a good story; they'd be lying.
    Lol, as a matter of fact, we have a storm going on right now.
    May 8th, 2010 at 06:04am