This was soooo very cute and so very sad. It reminded me of the music video for All These Things I Hate by Bullet for My Valentine. So freaking sadddd. But I enjoyed it so much. Thanks sooo much for entering this in my contest. I'll let you know when the judging period is over and the winners are announced.
-Cries- I....really liked this. Like...a lot. It was really said, and sweet<3 You did a really good job(: I'm glad it wasn't all clichéd. I get tired of those<3 Anwaysss. Good luck<3 xo
Oh my god. This was so heartbreaking and so incredibly sweet all at the same time. I loved how you set it up at the beginning, with things being kind of vague and then as the story progresses we [the readers] discover what actually happened. I always like a little mystery in my stories. I absolutely adored their kiss scene. It was so cute. At the end, when Vince was going to get groceries, I was basically shouting at the screen "NO! Don't go!" I just knew you were gonna kill him off, and the way you wrote it was simply lovely. Your spelling and grammar were impeccable, which I liked a lot. And you set this story in California, where I live. It makes me happy.
Oh my god. This is so beautiful and yet so sad! You write very well, you captured moments perfectly. Don't let anyone tell you this isn't a good story; they'd be lying. Lol, as a matter of fact, we have a storm going on right now.
Very good <3