Love the title. It's so mysterious and appealing to the readers.
Layout
Kind of plain, but, yet, there is something about it that just seems perfect.
Summary
I love the quote and it really gives the reader a feel for what is to come.
Story
1: Lovely descriptions. I absolutely adore the way the character speaks and sets up the story. It's as if I can hear him in my head, telling me his life story. Very well written. The way he fell in love with God made me love it all the more.
2: Well, this one took me off guard. I hadn't expected him to actually fall in love with hi band member. Lol But it's a very good chapter. I felt the emotion behind it. Just a few grammar errors. =D
3: Very amusing chapter. I would have to say I was a little saddened to hear about the break up of the band. The last paragraph was perfect. The perfect ending.
Overall
A very lovely story. I loved every minute of it. What was really great about it was the fact that no one spoke. There was no dialogue. I find that rare and enchanting in a good story. Great job! <3
I really liked reading this. (: The summary really pulled me in. You have loads of potential, and you're talented. I think this could have a few more details, but other than that, you did a brilliant job! Great job. (:
I thought that this was pretty good. The only thing that I could think to just pick at was the fact this seemed more like a biography then a story. And I'm not really into that so much. I would add more detail, or a flashback, something to make it a little more realistic and a little less... text book?
Other than that, I thought you did a good job and a nice twist. I don't know so much about Guns N' Roses, but this managed to keep my captivated through the whole story.
This is extremely good! I think you did a great job making us feel what he was feeling. I loved how it felt like Axl was telling us about his life. This is definitely not what I expected [in a good way :)]. Great job, and thanks for entering the contest :)
Okayy.. haha I loved it! the quote in the summery was great and i think it speaks the truth.. and your story is set up very nicely.. and its definitely not what I expected. haha i expected a sappy love story between the reader and Axl... I like that it has an autobiography feel to it but like he's sitting there telling us what happened. The only thing I feel could im prove it is detail.. make us feel what he is feeling, see what he's seeing.. but other than that every thing is dandy :D haha and thank you for entering the contest, I enjoyed reading this quiet a bit! ahha n_n
I'm totally listening to Physical by Olivia Newton John right now and it's murdering the tone of this story. let's get physical, physical i wanna get physical lemme hear your body talk
Ahem....anyway
I really do like this. I love the summary, it really sets the story up. I feel like there could be some more detail and whatnot. But otherwise, it's really decent. It's got some potential. :]
I must say that this is great and it was mind blowing. I liked how you started it out, it was cool.
I have never heard of Axl Rose expect for once or twice. And I have heard of Guns N Roses before. I'm not that familiar with them. So, thank you for picking him and giving me a beautiful story about his life. The quote on the summary page is just awesome!
I was hooked by the first chapter. It was really neat how God was his first love and then music. It was really cool for you to do that! I must agree with the above comments! It's sad that he went through all of those things. I felt like crying when Erin lost the baby.
This was a wonderful story and thanks for entering and following all the rules.
I'm very sorry that I couldn't read this sooner! :)
the last chapter was amazing. Like a recount, but more personal. This whole story was amazing. Sad, funny, sweet . . . you name it, you had it. Love, it’s got the ability to save your life but it also has the ability to end it. This line was just . . . wow. Perfectly ended.
Second chapter; Awesome. Aw, his life is so complicated. Love, love, and more love. Also, the dates and ages . . . I love them. It gives your story a bit of unique-ness and tells us when everything was. Yes, I do like this story,
The summary and quote are absolutely amazing. I love how you put that in there. And the first chapter . . . wow. It describes everything wonderfully, and it tells of things that everyone can relate to. I love it!
Secondly, I read the first chapter and I actually really like it. I have no idea who Axl Rose is though. >.< I don't pay much attention to celebrities. Sometimes...I don't know I fail. Anywho, good deal. I'll finish the rest latah.
Ahh... it was wonderful, fantabulous, you name it! Just watch some spelling mistakes and some parts that could use a coma, in the third chapter. It touched me, really emotional and heartbreaking... sometimes I wonder if all the stuff we write had a dose of reality and real events. That's why I think that this story could be very much real, all of it... you never know. We might just never know the truth :)
I love how you talk about him falling in love with god and then with music and how he considered that to be lucky. I thought that was quite lovely. I'm loving this. I can't wait for the last one. :)
I did not see it coming at all, Axl and Slash romantically involved... I thought it was going to be Axl heart-broken by Erin or someone else... but you gave it such a twist. Wasn't expecting it. Great job.