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Title

Love the title. It's so mysterious and appealing to the readers.

Layout

Kind of plain, but, yet, there is something about it that just seems perfect.

Summary

I love the quote and it really gives the reader a feel for what is to come.

Story

1: Lovely descriptions. I absolutely adore the way the character speaks and sets up the story. It's as if I can hear him in my head, telling me his life story. Very well written. The way he fell in love with God made me love it all the more.

2: Well, this one took me off guard. I hadn't expected him to actually fall in love with hi band member. Lol But it's a very good chapter. I felt the emotion behind it. Just a few grammar errors. =D

3: Very amusing chapter. I would have to say I was a little saddened to hear about the break up of the band. The last paragraph was perfect. The perfect ending.

Overall

A very lovely story. I loved every minute of it. What was really great about it was the fact that no one spoke. There was no dialogue. I find that rare and enchanting in a good story. Great job! <3

I really liked reading this. (:
The summary really pulled me in.
You have loads of potential, and you're talented.
I think this could have a few more details, but other than that, you did a brilliant job!
Great job. (:

I thought that this was pretty good. The only thing that I could think to just pick at was the fact this seemed more like a biography then a story. And I'm not really into that so much. I would add more detail, or a flashback, something to make it a little more realistic and a little less... text book?

Other than that, I thought you did a good job and a nice twist. I don't know so much about Guns N' Roses, but this managed to keep my captivated through the whole story.

Thanks for entering and awesome job(:

This is extremely good! I think you did a great job making us feel what he was feeling. I loved how it felt like Axl was telling us about his life. This is definitely not what I expected [in a good way :)]. Great job, and thanks for entering the contest :)

Okayy.. haha I loved it! the quote in the summery was great and i think it speaks the truth.. and your story is set up very nicely.. and its definitely not what I expected. haha i expected a sappy love story between the reader and Axl... I like that it has an autobiography feel to it but like he's sitting there telling us what happened. The only thing I feel could im prove it is detail.. make us feel what he is feeling, see what he's seeing.. but other than that every thing is dandy :D haha and thank you for entering the contest, I enjoyed reading this quiet a bit! ahha n_n

I'm totally listening to Physical by Olivia Newton John right now
and it's murdering the tone of this story.
let's get physical, physical i wanna get physical lemme hear your body talk

Ahem....anyway

I really do like this.
I love the summary, it really sets the story up.
I feel like there could be some more detail and whatnot.
But otherwise, it's really decent.
It's got some potential. :]

Very well written my dear.

I must say that this is great and it was mind blowing. I liked how you started it out, it was cool.

I have never heard of Axl Rose expect for once or twice. And I have heard of Guns N Roses before. I'm not that familiar with them. So, thank you for picking him and giving me a beautiful story about his life. The quote on the summary page is just awesome!

I was hooked by the first chapter. It was really neat how God was his first love and then music. It was really cool for you to do that! I must agree with the above comments! It's sad that he went through all of those things. I felt like crying when Erin lost the baby.

This was a wonderful story and thanks for entering and following all the rules.

I'm very sorry that I couldn't read this sooner! :)

the last chapter was amazing.
Like a recount, but more personal.
This whole story was amazing.
Sad, funny, sweet . . . you name it, you had it.
Love, it’s got the ability to save your life but it also has the ability to end it.
This line was just . . . wow.
Perfectly ended.

Good luck in the contest (:

Second chapter; Awesome.
Aw, his life is so complicated. Love, love, and more love.
Also, the dates and ages . . . I love them.
It gives your story a bit of unique-ness and tells us when everything was.
Yes, I do like this story,

The summary and quote are absolutely amazing. I love how you put that in there.
And the first chapter . . . wow.
It describes everything wonderfully, and it tells of things that everyone can relate to.
I love it!

First thing I want to say.

Title should be Love is Like a Glass Splinter.

Secondly, I read the first chapter and I actually really like it.
I have no idea who Axl Rose is though. >.<
I don't pay much attention to celebrities.
Sometimes...I don't know I fail.
Anywho, good deal. I'll finish the rest latah.

well first off, thanks for mentioning me X) I was more then happy to help with the layout.

And second, thanks for making me super sad :(

This was beautifully written, I could really feel it.

that was really sad

Ahh... it was wonderful, fantabulous, you name it!
Just watch some spelling mistakes and some parts that could use a coma, in the third chapter.
It touched me, really emotional and heartbreaking... sometimes I wonder if all the stuff we write had a dose of reality and real events.
That's why I think that this story could be very much real, all of it... you never know. We might just never know the truth :)

I'm not a huge Guns And Roses fan, but this was definitely worth the read. :) Glad you recommended this.

I love it!

Hu...i quite like this. Keep going! More soon please

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I love how you talk about him falling in love with god and then with music and how he considered that to be lucky. I thought that was quite lovely. I'm loving this. I can't wait for the last one. :)

I did not see it coming at all, Axl and Slash romantically involved... I thought it was going to be Axl heart-broken by Erin or someone else... but you gave it such a twist. Wasn't expecting it. Great job.