[font=1] This is a really interesting story. It totally reminds me of, like, a korean drama XD I give you props for making it in Japan, because asian culture is awesome. What I noticed was that whenever the characters were speaking, it'd go back and forth from formal to informal. like here: Takaya looked at me and smiled. He looked at the person before me and put out his right hand. “Hi, nice to meet you; and you are?”(formal)
“Wow Sayuri, I’m getting the vibe your friend doesn’t like me.” Takaya said feigning hurt.(informal)
Yea, that was really interesting. I have to say that Ujiteru is my favorite character. But he seems to be kinda confusing when in the beginning she talks of him as like, a total jerk, and then he goes and steals her homework. But then at the end of the chapter, he KISSES HER. (omg moment right there.) It seems that he has different feelings for her than what she thought.
I was kinda wondering why she rode in the car of her teacher. I don't know why, but that kinda freaked me out. And also if she biked to school, then rode in the car of her teacher back home, who would have brought her bike back? It seems to be getting into a fantasy feeling when she figures out that Takaya was in her dreams. I'm still curious to know if she is a flitra, or not. And when Takaya get's the text from her, it's kinda funny because he seems jealous. Beautiful layout by the way.
This is an amazing story! I've never read anything like this. I love the characters and plot so far. The writing is very beautiful and descriptive. I love each and everyone of the characters, even the Ujiteru. This definitely caught my interest at the mere mention of taking place in Japan. I love the Asian culture and this by far has caught the details down. I'm fascinated even with the few chapters that have been posted and can't wait for the next to come and see how the story unravels. Keep up with the good work. You're amazing.
I read this before, dunno why I didn't comment though. I am now so, no harm done yeah? It's 3am so all I can say is, update please. :] I love Japan! ps: Who's the Math teacher, Mr. Hitake or Laradon? I'm confused.
Ok so so far I like it alrite but it's a bit confusing and that teacher is CREEPY but it's good I started to really like when I got to the fourth chapter before that it wus kinda borin but that's alrite cuz it jst took time to build up to it I've read other thugs that were slower but I do like it good job
Oh that Ujiteru has something up his sleeve and I want to know what it is! :D And so many questions about the dream and that kid who gave the notebook and that new kid from the last chapter :D Oh btw, I wasn't sure how to pronounce Sayuri at first, but I just watched "Memoirs of a Geisha" last weekend and I thought "Sayuri" was a really pretty sounding name.
I love the layout! the story is really interesting. I like it! Its setting makes me think of Marmalad Boy!!!! anyway, I think this story has potential, but as rains.in.spain said, you don't need to tell the reader all the details. Update, I'll be waiting!!!XD