I liked how you wrote "but some people still believe in Christ" as if it's a very distant thing like actual mythology. I thought it was very clever also tying in the story of Adam and Eve and that people shouldn't know everything. It kind of sent shivers down my spine. It's reminds me of every story that has a messed up government system like The Giver, Farenheit 451, and The Bar Code Tattoo. I think it's my favorite to read, probably because of my opinions on our government and fascination with other countries'.
And I know exactly what you mean. Pretty much all my stories have rough beginnings because everything I thought up, all the epicness and awesome sauce climaxes, happen much later in the story. That's why a lot of the time I find myself writing scenes out of order.
Okay, first, I love the layout and banner. Really cool! Second, I loved the beginning of this. It's all mysterious and creepy sounding. Klaus sounds sort of cool from what I read, haha! Subbing this as well (: <3
It was really good. I liked it. I really liked the idea of it too, but I wish it was longer. To me, it seems unfinished, but whatever, it's still awesome. =]