0.0. . . .She has changed. I'm suprised Frank's being so mature about it though, but he is right. I'm really glad you updated I've been missing this story. The other is keeping me tied over (it's really good by the way) HAPPY ALMOST BIRTHDAY!!!
Just a few character notes, sorry if I go into critic mode here.
I find that Kat has been developing some very shallow emotions for the past few chapters, her persona has been lacking depth and she seems to becoming a very angry, flat, 2D character, compared to her former self who was a very round, 3D, character who's emotions had a lot reasoning and detail behind it.
I understand her persona changing as the character changes emotionally, but it just seems to drag a little bit now. Where it was once full of emotion and detail now it is just, i really can't describe it. it just isn't a good thing.
if Kat is going to be turning bitter than that's fine, as long as you keep it interesting. Don't drag, keep up with the right amount of detail, and don't lose depth. And, you have to keep the heart of the story alive. I love love love this story, but if you need to take a couple of extra days to get your ideas together in order to write to the fullest than do it. Don't rush it, let the amazing ideas come to you.
But, other than that the update was sweet. I love the tension building between her and her father. Poor kat, we can't always get what we want in life. I think some one on one time with dad is in order, no ella, no frank, just kat and dad. let the emotions pour. Keep it civil though. they have some things to work out, don't they?
Keep it up, I'm loving it.
P.S.
HAPPY BIRTHDAY SMEXI!
I wish you a day full of lots of sugary products and novelty items!
I wish i could give you a fun sized Frankie for a day, but i've had my magical pixie powers suspended indefinably after i tried to make a pikachu doll come to life and in the process blew up four city blocks :(
But, and can give you a little gift in the form of youtube videos! yay!
Sooooo happy to have an update, hun. I think it would be interesting if Frank started bonding with Ella and a certain someone got the lil green monster about it ;) Lol, anyway, great update, can't wait!
Great update. Frankie can be so cute sometimes. . . okay all the time. lol 8( I'm getting the boxset too ,for Christmas. So I'm not being told anything about it besides it's ordered, hmmmm I wonder. It'll be totally worth it, but still I wanna know. Oh, well I'm so ecxited for Monday, I pre-ordered two weeks ago. They're going to be on Jimmy Kimmel tomorrow night (I've got it Tivo'd) Yeeeessshhhhh, so excited!
so i was wondering why you hadnt updated in likee two weeks cuz i havent recives an email up date so i came and there are a whole 2 updates i missed !!!! soo yea loved the call you back later scene and i love how franks not afraid to show his needyness at school its like hes not scared to show his love 10\10 x two since i missed a ch ; P
i'm baaaaack! first story i checked! as always (; oh my dear, i haven't been on in so long, i got to read TWO updates right now. i sure am a lucky ducky. there was even sexy time! that made it all so much better, hahaha. well, i am thoroughly impressed as of right now. the way you described their passion for eachother should be illegal. it was most beautifully written. like unintentional poetry flowing from the lips of a lover to their other. it was gaaaawgeous ;DDD your story has succesfully made my day once again. i'm gonna stick my hand in the cookie jar and ask for another update. oh and darling, i'd be honored to have you birth my children. but child support has got me up the butt right now. i can't afford it. who knew he would get pregnant...again, damn elijah. hahahahaha. i expect more!
I fucking love you. Just so you know. And don't ever forget it, because that authors' note in particular made me want to carry your[ babies, and you're amazing skill of writing that you have.