Mariya - Comments

*shivers*
the idea was really interesting and I can't wait to see your next chapter for this. :)
You write best in horror and fantasy, I think.
Your emotions and descriptions in this makes this all the more creepy. XD
I loved this, one of your best so far.
Great job on this as always. <3

This was CRAZY! I loved it though. I really can't wait for the story to begin. THe idea was great, and the line where the parents walked in seeing their nine year old daughter swapping fire, or whatever. That was my favorite line. I love this. I can't wait to see it as a full story. :)

Man, this was awesome! Love how she always puts things like "won't we, didn't we, and isn't it" at the end of her sentences. It gives a sort of mysterious feel to her personality.

I also like how the story went well with the summary. Sometimes people write summaries and then the actually piece is way off. But this was great. It's been awhile since I have read a really well written supernatural piece. Good job

And a river turning red? Awesome

Okay, whoa. This is seriously amazing. I love the title and everything about it, especially this line: And so, at the age of seven, Mariya dabbled in magic for the very first time. While I think it would be awesome for seven year olds to dabble with magic, it probably won't end very well >.>
I have a slight thing for insane asylum stories, hahah xD I like the variation on the name Mariya as well. I'm subbing. Can't wait to see what happens next! <3

This. Has. To. Be. A. Story!

It's amazing in everything, not scared to do the unbelievable. I loved it.

You weren't lying when you said that Mariya needed more love. I expected much much more comments on this. This is simply beautiful. You painted such a clear picture of Mariya that I'm afraid that if I dare try to touch it, she'll burn me and use my skin for a coat... Or something like that. XP You're an amazing writer. <3 I can't wait to see this full chaptered story!

This is.... Erlack! I'm lost for words. It's amazing. Yes, more, I'd subscribe to this in half a second.
Red river. o.O
But unique and fabulous. And I loooooove this. :D

The river turning red was like woah. O_O
Yeah. You should definitely continue this, man.

I really liked that Im curious as to what the plot is once it's a chapter story. I'll subscribe this seems interesting.

This. . . . was. . . . . beautiful
The end. Your writing is simply fantastic. I was totally creeped out when the river turned red.
Especially when you mentioned it being 'fingers of blood' that was really creppy. o_o
Anyway, I just really loved this and I'm going to have to go look at the rest of your writing now, I know it will be as great as this - maybe even better. Anyhow, fantastic job. <3

I haven't read about magic that much before, so this is really new for me, I loved it.

Mariya Mosalsky? It's such a unique name! ^^

I very much loved this I'm also with Sheen on the full-length story: I say go for it (:

Okay, so I only found two typos:
but what she didn't know what that Mariya... I believe that "what" was meant to be "was" (:

a few symbol... "Symbol" should be pluaralized (:

I also agree with Sheen on the note that she was such a maniac, but so wonderfully clever and quick-witted.

It was unique in the sense that she didn't adore the princesses, but was also not the stereotypical witch. That definitely made it much better off(:

Simply stated, I loved this a lot. Amazing!

Oh, my God! I loved this! It was amazing! Seriously! It's rare that you get a good story with pagan magic like this, but it was soooooo good! If you did turn it into a full length story, I would be psyched!

Mariya is so creepy with her obvious insanity, yet she's so intelligent.

Great job!