Outspoken Silence - Comments

Oh my God. Whenever I read abuse stories, it almost makes me feel like I'm being abused. Thank the Lord I wasn't. Nobody deserves to :/ It hurts to read this. You're really brave <3
Lovely job! :D

This is actually really, really cool. The narrator has that sort of stoner/hanger-on type of voice, and I love that. Most of the chapters are just sort of back-storyish, but you do get the point across.

Overall, I'd give this an 8.5/10, just because it's much more than mediocre, but it does have its flaws.

Well done.

:( I'm sorry my dear one. Your writing is great if it makes you feel any better.

That was so a sad story, and knowing that it happen makes it so heartwrenching. I wish nothing like that could ever happen to anyone, but it does and it's so horrible. But you are speaking out about it and I think that you writing skills are just amazing. I hope you will contuine to write this because I really want to read more. You did such a great job.

I <3 it. :_=}

Wow... Baby, this is great. It reminds me off both of my parents..
I never knew that you had ever gone through anything like this.
In fact, I really wish you HADN'T gone through these things..
No one should or should have gone through it.
Reading this, I get the impression that an older, professional writer is writing.
You're reeeaaallyyyy good:) You'll do great writing for a career:)

Btw, I love you.... a lot:)

wow. this is really good(:

Oh my gosh... this was really strong. The meaning was powerful, very sad, but powerful.
It takes a good writer to write emotions like that. Good job. :) Keep it coming.

Aw, girly, this was really good.

I like it a lot
Keep writing :D

wow. dats actually really good. its actually addicting to read. keep on wrting. and ill leave comments. :)

I am totally against everything in this story. Normally it would make my stomach churn. But I can't seem to stop reading...

=] your doing a fantastical job!!
ima keep reading:)

This is so sad. One of my mom's boyfriends got rid of the first pet I ever had that was really mine, and while it's not exactly the Monster's fault that Blithe's puppy has to go, it still goes back to him so I feel bad for her about that.

I thought in Chapter 2 you did a really good job at portraying how child-like her thoughts were, which was wonderful considering it was stated that the memory was from age 4. Well done.

Chapter 3 was really intense. Blithe's description of how the Monster and Scarlett cheated on each other was more than a child should know, but for someone who's not living a normal and guarded childhood it's something that's a real issue and something that they'd be aware of and I think it's amazing how you're working in the fact that this isn't letting her be a child completely. Her disbelief with Scarlett cheating on Jasper still kept enough of the childishness though, so it's not like she's like immediately growing up.

There's something about the way that Blithe reguards Scarlett that I can't exactly explain, but I love. Maybe I'll think of a way to describe it in the next few chapters haha.

Good job, good job, good job :D

The story's getting to be more heart-breaking. :( There's a sort of innocence (or so it feels) in the Blithe's voice, but yet you know it's not really there. If that makes sense.
Anyways, really good job.

Oh, and I really loved Pebbles's name. :)

awww the 3rd chapter is so sad. I started tearing up.

Awesome. It was so well-written! I loved it so, so much. You really have a talent for writing.

This is really great so far. Great job.

A great beginning; your writing allows the message to hit home, even in the first chapter.

The banner is very awesomeness. I couldn't imagine what it be like to have a 'monster' in my home. It will be intresting to read it from someone who's actucally been through it & not just writing it.