Typewriters in the Attic - Comments

  • j_marvis

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    It's finally found. My refuge... Please don't stop writing. Ever. Well..I dunno. -A fan
    September 1st, 2010 at 04:51am
  • Donnie Said.

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    Your out of your mother fucking mind.... but I do enjoy that. >:)
    August 27th, 2010 at 03:20am
  • seashelled

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    Maybe put the character's name in the beginning or slyly mention them at the bottom?
    I like it.
    August 26th, 2010 at 10:50pm
  • Veegz

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    ...His name is Clyde.
    And your grammar is atrocious.
    But this is amazing.
    August 20th, 2010 at 02:08am
  • get.low

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    This makes me feel so sane!
    I think i'm in love!
    August 17th, 2010 at 12:20am
  • Whatsername?

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    I absolutely love this. Its so original and interesting. Please continue!
    July 19th, 2010 at 08:06am
  • Isadora Pierce

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    You need to capitalize everything in your title.
    July 6th, 2010 at 04:41pm
  • xMidnightxVampx

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    *Slow Clap* It's really relatable to someone with bipolar disorder...Among many other mental illness' but I can't speak for them.

    You completely feel the intense emotions of the character and sense her confusion, distress, pain, depression, self-loathing, ect...It's amazing the different moods you've created with such abstract story telling.
    July 6th, 2010 at 02:17am
  • RushKnob

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    Oh, ho ho. Wonderful. Your mind. Don't worry, you're better than her.
    July 5th, 2010 at 11:58pm
  • astontheowl

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    Amazing. I know this is chaotic, I know this isn't supposed to make sense, but every word sounds like something you stole from an amazing human mind. It's like you are professing a creepy kind of honesty with these pieces. The pain behind it is strong, but I can sense hope too.

    Whether or not if this is supposed to be based off of you, a friend or whatever, your accuracy is scary. I crave your intelligent concepts. Please continue.
    July 5th, 2010 at 11:48pm
  • thisisnotaboutme

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    okay, i love this story, but i do have one issue with it. i have no idea where it's going, and what it means. now don't get me wrong, a little mystery is a-okay. but i would like to know, are the percents supposed to represent different characters? or how well the main character is coping that day? the inner monologue, though emotionally revealing, witty, and well placed, doesn't provide much insight into the actual going-on's of the story. could you be a little more specific? i'm not saying to dumb it down, just maybe to reconsider what the story is doing as a whole, and how your readers see it.
    July 5th, 2010 at 11:29pm
  • Nightmare Fuel

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    I really like reading this ~
    July 5th, 2010 at 09:36am
  • LilMissMargarita;

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    The short description made me laugh.
    The actual story is very lovable.
    I'm subscribing.
    July 1st, 2010 at 05:09pm
  • thisisnotaboutme

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    i actually really loved this. it's just this messy sort of paranoia that goes perfectly with the way you've presented the character. the last line really pulled together a great first impression.
    July 1st, 2010 at 01:49am
  • xMidnightxVampx

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    This is really good. It's chaos and like being in some one's mind. It would make a good performace arts piece.
    July 1st, 2010 at 01:41am