Exit, Pursued by a Bear - Comments

  • turducken

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    The title is unique, I find it a tad odd that she fell in love at first sight, simply because she doesn't seem like the type.
    Love at first sight is usually stored for people who fall super, super easily.
    It's a little over-done that she had to hold a gasp over how hot he is.
    OKAY, OKAY, I WOULD EAT ICE CREAM OFF TAYLOR'S ABS, I don't believe I'd gasp if he walked into the room.

    I only read the first chapter, simply because it doesn't really capture my preferences. I really enjoyed how you have criminals as your characters, makes them unique.
    It's got a lot of potential. :)
    August 11th, 2010 at 07:21pm
  • love potion

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    Dude, I'm subbing.

    This is so funny! But also cute and romantic and a whole bunch of other things I can't even begin to describe. I love Wayland; he's my favorite. And Corn! xD

    Update soon, please. <3
    August 11th, 2010 at 03:49am
  • wicked ways

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    I like it so far.
    The background is way too hard on my eyes though.
    The summary was really good.
    I love your writing style.
    It's a good story altogether, good job :)
    August 11th, 2010 at 03:40am
  • Beauty_From_Pain

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    Awww so cute Jess!!!! Love it :) Lush yew!!! <3
    July 23rd, 2010 at 06:51am
  • samanthalynn;

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    I think that this is really good, kinda confusing at first but gets alot better and is going to be very interesting :]
    July 20th, 2010 at 08:27am
  • Patty Lovell

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    I love Maggie, by the way, she's so great! ^_^

    I like this :D
    July 20th, 2010 at 07:23am
  • Sundance Kid.

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    You write like a lot of modern writers, I don't know if that is a good thing or bad thing. The way you write reminds me of the Percy Jackson seris. Anyways, this was good, I liked it.
    July 20th, 2010 at 05:56am
  • alexander bernadotte

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    Travis in an ass, 'nough said. I hate, hate, hate him. x] Which goes back to the cottage in the woods idea with the cute little woodland creatures. But anyways, since you showed me a preview beforehand, you know my love for Wyatt. I mean, he's such a freakin' cutie. And I wanna steal Sparkplug. WHERE DO YOU COME UP WITH THOSE NAMES?! LORD! They're amazingggg <3
    Y'know I love you ;D <3
    July 20th, 2010 at 05:52am
  • solovely;

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    I don't know. I like it, but then again I don't. There wasn't a lot of detail in here, and I just felt like it went so fast. I liked that there was action, sort of. (:
    July 19th, 2010 at 01:17am
  • Patty Lovell

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    This is good so far.

    I didn't like how short the preface was, and I didn't get much out of it, you just basically told us that she loves/hates this boy, but you could have said that in the chapter. :/

    But The rest of it is fine and dandy. ;p
    July 19th, 2010 at 12:09am
  • losing control.

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    Alright, I just read the first chapter and to be honest, I'm not really interesed in it.
    It seemed a little..cliche, almost, to me.
    There wasn't a whole lot of description in it, and I just couldn't see myself getting into it.
    I'm not saying it's bad, because it's not, but nothing about it really..pulled me in.
    That probably sounded really harsh, sorry.
    But on a brighter note, I liked the characters and Hell's Kitchen is one of my favorite shows. x]
    July 18th, 2010 at 11:33pm
  • alexander bernadotte

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    Ew, creeper vans! I hates them. We always have to park next to them too. I always imagine a creepy dude with no teeth coming out and saying, "Candy, missy? 'Tis good, 'tis verrry good."
    I has the creeps now xD
    Anyhoo, I have to admit that I'd love to see a few more details between the dialogue. Dunno, that's just me. xD But y'know I love everything you write. Lovely job! <3
    July 18th, 2010 at 10:58pm
  • youth and whiskey.

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    hair probably an afro from tossing and turning all night

    That amused me. A lot. Like seriously, I found it way funnier than it probably was.

    Anyway, I really love this already. I can't wait to see how it turns out and all. This story is just. . .gah. . addicting. I really, really love your writing style. :'D

    Update soon, dear.

    Oh, and keep up the amazing work. <3
    July 18th, 2010 at 03:55am
  • alexander bernadotte

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    Okay, goofy goober. Y'know I love all your work to pieces. And since you gave me half of chapter 3 to read, I was like: sdfkjsadkjhfsadjhfajgs this girl is awesome <3
    Whoa, this is a lame comment. But anyways, I love this line the most: “Do I. Make you. Nervous?”
    Tee hee ;D He can make me nervous all he wants. xD
    Ilysm <3
    July 17th, 2010 at 07:06am
  • Schience Officer Fry

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    Mrs. Hatake, I don't like Travis much either. xD He'll get better, though. I promise. (:
    July 17th, 2010 at 06:50am
  • Hardly.Harley

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    I love this so much! Maggie's my favorite by far. Haha. I don't like Travis much though... not sure why. But the characters are really awesome. And where'd you come up with calling him Corn? I think it's so funny and cute!
    July 17th, 2010 at 06:46am
  • stencil heart.

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    So I just read the preface and first chapter.
    These characters, first off, are amazing. I thought you would mess up the idea of criminals, but you shocked me. It was great.
    It's so funny. I love everything. I'm going to keep reading and subscribe. :D
    July 17th, 2010 at 06:24am
  • xxMyDestinyxx

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    I actually really like this!

    The idea is really interesting and it's so hilarious :D
    Travis seems so sweet and, kinda charming. Maggie has a wonderful character. Lastly, I'm definitely subscribing :)

    And lastly, "Sparkplug, attack"!!!
    :D
    July 14th, 2010 at 07:10am
  • Patty Lovell

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    The chapters were really awesome, I really like where this is going ;)

    Great job!
    July 14th, 2010 at 06:44am
  • Schience Officer Fry

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    I guess I'll add a little more in the preface. (: Thanks, guys. <3
    July 10th, 2010 at 11:21pm