Well goodness. I just wanna punch that guy in the face. -__- Not cool.... But great start!! Def. suscribing. I like the slight sarcasm in her thoughts. I'm a sucker for sarcasm :)
Whoa, I love this! I love how you have it put together - it's easy to read, but the words aren't so simple that it makes it annoying. Definitely keep writing this.