May 11th, 2012 at 11:24pm
I'm definitely not an Avenged Sevonfold fan, or at least I don't read the fanfiction centered around them ever[for some reason all vampire stories are about them, I don't know why]. But I clicked on this figuring it seemed interesting, then I saw Bat Country and was like dammit. But I continued reading and so far it's turned out a very interesting read. I've caught a few spelling errors here and there, nothing that can't be fixed with a quick once over throughout the story. Also, in chapter two where she's pretending to be asleep you make everything seem so clear and since it's in first person and her eyes are shut I doubt she'd know every single thing they were doing. Since she is most likely relying on sound, maybe hearing 'the scratch of wood against the floor, signaling a chair being pulled out" something along those lines. Otherwise, keep up the good work. :]
I like the layout as well.
So far (in the first few chapters) there wasn't any change yet, I wonder what you're planning to do with this
I really can't wait for more
Hope you update soon =)
I also hope that you can get over your writer's block =)