I read the first chapter for the story review game.
I liked this story. It was good. I think you captured the scene very well. Though the description seemed a little off in some places and I was lost and had to read through a few paragraphs a few times.
Unlike what people usually say, it wasn't a blur. It wasn't slow motion. I really do remember it. I say I don't, however. I never want to relive that moment, as I do whenever I describe it. I think that was my favorite part. Describing how it is to go through that. I guess describing the moment. It really brings out something that drags you deeper into the story. I might read further into the story. I kind of want to know what happens. You left it at a slightly cliche' cliff hanger for the first chapter (right as I thought, I went blank[/i) type thing) but I think that works fine for this story.
So over all I liked it. (: I also might read something else of yours. <33
That chapter was scary. The way that you made her more scared of him than she was of the flames was so well done. And she still had some feelings for him. That'd be almost sweet, were it not for the violence. And the ending was very cool. I liked it a lot ;)
Hooray for updates! Ahh, Ian. It's looking to quite a nice (or maybe even tragic?) romance on the hospital ward there. Will they get together? Does he see past the scars and disfiguration, and really see her? Or will horrible circumstance be the end of them before it's begun? Why do I always seem to ask questions, when I know they're going to be rhetorical? It was amazing.
Man, how can you get better with every update??? That was so good,. You description never ceases to amaze. Still just as horrific, but now even more in-depth, hightlighting her injuries greusomely, amazingly. Yay. Update soon would be much appreciated ^^
well, what can I say? Amazing, I love the way you have worded it and explained everything she is thinking, feeling and seeing. I am just like, wow... update when you can
Aftermath. Such a perfect aftermath. The confusion, over whether she was alive or dead; trying to reason with herself on how she couln't be dead, but at the same time, still undecided. The description of the injuries were horrific. And that's what made them perfect. And when she asked for a mirror at the end...God, you have got to feel sorry for her. Aww.
I liked this story. It was good. I think you captured the scene very well. Though the description seemed a little off in some places and I was lost and had to read through a few paragraphs a few times.
Unlike what people usually say, it wasn't a blur. It wasn't slow motion. I really do remember it. I say I don't, however. I never want to relive that moment, as I do whenever I describe it.
I think that was my favorite part. Describing how it is to go through that. I guess describing the moment. It really brings out something that drags you deeper into the story.
I might read further into the story. I kind of want to know what happens. You left it at a slightly cliche' cliff hanger for the first chapter (right as I thought, I went blank[/i) type thing) but I think that works fine for this story.
So over all I liked it. (: I also might read something else of yours.
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