Life Given. - Comments

okay. so that made me cry hahaa. can't wait for the prequel!!!!!!

Great ending! The way you described everything really made the scene pop for me. You had the right balance of dialogue and description. I was surprised at what Jimmy did, but I think in a way, that's how it had to be. I was able to see it all and feel the emotions of each of he guys. It was the perfect ending to a great story. I can't wait for the next one!

You brought me to tears. I pretty much cried at the end of this. I could barely see the screen, but I kept reading. I loved it. I really did. I'm not sugar coating anything. It's hard to find a good story on here that's well written about your heroes now a days and this was just that. It was great! Moved me to tears just like my own one shot - er uh, now a two shot - did. Thank you. Thank you for writing this :]

I'll shuddup and stop blabbing now. I'm probably just a blubbering idiot.

Fucking fantastic ending to the story; I'm weeping!
I would most definitely love to get some kind of notice when you start posting the prequel! Maybe you can PM or comment me; certainly let me know! ^_^

This is an amazing story and I really don't have a lot of criticism because I was just in love with your style and the plot and everything. My only suggestion would be to keep writing. The more you write, the better you get!

Anyways, this was awesome and please let me know when the prequel starts; don't forget me!! XD
Have a wonderful day, doll, and keep writing amazing stories! ^_^

oh.my.god. i'm in tears right now, i can't even really see what i'm typing. I can't even fathom a better ending to a story then the one you just posted.
I want to thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of writing with the world of mibba.
<3Jenna

foREVer in our hearts

I totally agree with Ashleee Acclaim; I'm horribly saddened at the fact that the next chapter is the last one. But I guess that's a good thing because it means that I love your writing to pieces! ^_^

And I totally think you should go for a prequel; I'd read it for sure! :P
Anyways, however sad I am that the next chapter is the last, I do hope you update soon!

the concept of this story is simply amazing, and i love the way you're written it.
It made me laugh, and cry. And i can't wait for the next chapter(:
<3Jenna

you best write a prequel! I love this and I'm sad that the next chapter is the last one!!!):

aww
i really like that they keep reminding her that shes in the band & their accepting.
& YES YES prequel/sequel thingy sounds like a great idea!

But you had such a good idea for this story! You really do! You should push yourself to write more than just ten pages. Hell, I've written over 211 for one story. I think it was 211. Maybe. I dunno. You definately should write the sequel to it if you do decide to end this.

I guess like Matt said, nothing lasts forever, and for all good things its true.

im sorry that the story is ending.
i wish you could right more cause this story is sooo good.
but i understand. :]

Better =). It was easier to picture the guys and Jimmy. I really liked the way you described Jimmy, because it makes him more "real". It'd be interesting to see what he's thinking, if that would fit with the next chapter. But the descriptions were better this time around. I also liked how you introduced her friends and Jimmy's guilty look. That would be good to expand on in the next chapter =).

I say go for the prequel!

Awesome story so far, keep it up!:D Update as soon as possible, I'll always read when I have a chance too!:)

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awww yay they are being friendly witrh each other now. great speach

I found this, and I fell in love. It's just wow. You definately amaze me. And you infulence me to write better. Very few authors on here can do that. Please update soon :]

I love being given the green light to critique the shit out of stuff :D.

I love the story, that's a given. It has a nice flow to it, the characters seem genuine, and you've written them in ways that are appropriate to your story. I like how they interact, and I like how the main character is still finding her way into the band, despite everyone telling her that she's already in. I like how she confronted Brian and gave him the kick in the butt that he needed.

One thing I would do differently: be more descriptive. You're like me: you're great at dialogue, and you write lots of it. I'm always getting caught on this by my friends when they rip my stories: dialogue is great, but it doesn't help the reader. I need to see where they are. I can visualize these places, but my vision might be different from yours. Describe the dressing room, the hallway, even the guitars. You describe the person by their facial expression, how their eyes look, their clothes, it doesn't have to be in depth. But we need to see more of where they are. What does Jimmy look like? If he's paranormal Jimmy, is he solid, transparent, just a voice, a floating head? There are many avenues to explore in description and trust me, I'm still working on it.

Overall, though, you have a great story. As I said, the main character is written perfectly and she's acting exactly as I imagine anyone would in that situation. I look forward to the next update!

that chapter made me cry, not really but almost. I loved it. keep up the amazing work!!!

hmm interesting like it

so i just love this. even though jimmy is gone in your story he is still there. its great.
cant wait for more!