The Riverbed - Comments

Okay, I'm in love. Like, really. It's so amazingly written and wonderful. Obviously, I'm not liking the major creep-o in the story. xD Ugh >.<
Anyways, can't wait for the next update! <3

Oh my God.

Because I can run faster than you.

And then the little girl getting murdered!? D:

What kind of sick person are you!?

I love this. Your writing is truly unique and beautiful.

Well done.

Dr.

I enjoyed this mucho. You have got to be one of my favorite authors on this site. :)
The intensity was wonderful, as well as the emotion and just everything else.

Dude.

This is epic.

Your writing is so beautiful - even more beautiful than the layout! xD

Your plot is great as well, I am very interested.

<3

I don't think she was murdered. I think shes still there. Or her murderer is creeping on Hannah now.

OMG, NOOO. She was murdered?!

That is so cruel of you, woman. But I'm glad I read this; now I'm even more curious as to see what's going to happen... Update soon, pleasepleaseplease. <3

Okay first of all, I love the layout <3

Awe, the poor little girl was murdered D:
But I really like how this was written. It flowed nicely.
I'm excited to see what happens with the creep-o and the notes. xD
Good job :D

Oh everything (except the corrections, teehee) in my last comment and more.<3 I am still ever so in love with this story and your way of writing. The ending nearly had me in tears. Such a sweet little thing was murdered. D: </3 Gah.

I love how water like your writing is: it just flows. ;) Lame, I know.<3 :) The layout and such is still as pretty as ever.

I like the line, "like honey."
It's cute/sweet/unique/interesting and it appealed to me. :)

I'm speechless.
Yes, you did that with your amazing-ness.
I love this, aha. Just in case I didn't make that clear.<3

I like this. The layout is pretty, and your writing style is pretty. Can I even use that to describe the writing-style? I don't know, but how you place the words makes them flow nicely together. C:

I'm going to sub because I want to know what happens next! I have an idea but I'll wait until you post the next chapter to see if I get to say "I knew it" out loud. Do update soon, love.

:D I like it :D please write more... and just somthing to say... I think you should have somthing to do with the gold silver thing, just a thought

They sat on the dock, kicking their seven year old legs that were beaten and bruised from their childish adventures, in the water.
- This makes it sound to me like they're sitting on the dock, in the water. Because of how you've placed the commas, I mean.

Overall I don't like the centered text. Nor how you've divided the story by using "---". It gets irksome in my opinion, and it always looks better just to make an extra paragraph. Or if anything, put "***".
It also felt a bit too short. I know it's just a prologue, but there wasn't enough in it to draw me in. At times it felt like you were trying too hard to sound poetic and deep, and it kind of just made me space out. It has potential sure, but unfortunately not entirely in my taste.

Good job though, overall.

Okay, I'm extremely jealous of your layout making skills. Like, really. All of your layouts are so gosh-darned gorgeous :D
Anyhoo, this is such an amazing beginning! I can't wait to see what happens. I hope Erika will be alright D:
I'm subbing <3

So, um, guess what? I think I love this too. :) Yeah, and I think you should like update soon.

This kind of made me giggle, because my name is Erica and my best friend's name is Hannah. x3
Anyways, your writing is really nice! Keep this up, dear.

Gripping start but it is prologue not prolouge, sorry. Other than that tiny thing it is a good story.

*gasp* It's a twins story! A female twins story! I love it. You're writing is lovely. I'm not sure how to describe it. It's... Fragile and pure. I love it. <3 The layout is pretty as well.

And a grammatical error.
“Hey, Erika,” the other girl, Hannah spoke in her small quiet voice, “how about you throw pebbles while I get us some lemonade?”
You forgot to capitalize the h in how.

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Amazing. :D

I don't usually read twin stories, but even the layout pulled me in.

Your writing is beautiful, hon. (:

I love this. I seriously am in love with this. You have an amazing writing style, and I need more! This whole plot looks so interesting, and I can't wait to see where you take this! Wonderful job!

The tiny font hurt my eyes. >.<

And you wrote Hanna around the middle, and everywhere else you spell is with an 'h', so. I take it it's a typo?

Other than that, this is really interesting and I was not in anyway expecting the end.
It's really well written, and the detail was, exactly that, very detailed.
Meh likes, meh likes. :)

It was cute. I'm excited to read more, so I'll be subscribing :]