Like a lot of others, I'm really not a fan of the Jonas Brothers, and while I do like the way you write, there are some parts that really confused me. I get how Bri matters - she's dating Nick and all, but I don't quite understand how Taira matters. Maybe they were childhood friends? Of course, it's probably just me. And I agree with gabbykillsmeese in that it's kind of weird he was so hurt and all when Bri dumped him and that he loves Taira too. Overall, I think your story was okay. (:
that was really good. i love nick jonas, so reading that wasn't too good for my health... him falling in love with someone other than me??? **sob sob sob** XD I loved it.
that was really good. i love nick jonas, so reading that wasn't too good for my health... him falling in love with someone other than me??? **sob sob sob** XD I loved it.
As you know, I'm not a fan . . . Anymore. But, if I were, I would definitely have squealed over this story. xD Oh, and Tiara texted while driving. O.o I don't care if you're in hysterics- just another reason not to do it. She could've crashed and died and then Nick and her would've never gotten together. ::sad face:: I like your writing style- it was very nice. I found a few spelling mistakes, but nothing to big. ^__^ <3
I'm not into Jonas Brothers, but imagining the characters as originals made this story very nice. It was simple yet effective, and extremely cute and romantic. Good job!
I´m gonna be honest and say I don´t like the Jonas Brothers. But this is a good story, I loved at the end of the chapter, I could imagine the whole fammily going "awww" haha
Firstly, sorry it took so long for me to comment back. I just realized that you commented on my journal. Sorry about that. ^^"
Anyway. I must say, I'm not really a fan of the Jonas Brothers. Quite the opposite actually, but I tried not to affect me. The first paragraph caught me slightly off guard. When Bri says her first lines of dialogue, it wasn't that believable to me. Then again, she seems like a fake and a horrible actor. Hehe.
Also, I have to agree with some of the comments. The whole stress induced attack doesn't seem plausible but the story wouldn't have worked anyway without it. Unless you found another way for Nick to collapse. Maybe he's just faint hearted. *shrugs*
This was very sweet. Kinda cliche, and kinda cheesy but not so much that it ruins the whole story. Keep on writing. =]
I'm not going to lie, I was kind of eh about having to read something "Jonas" because I'm not a fan but you surprised me after having read that. It was excellent. (:
I also loved how you ended it too with his family in the door way gushing. Very cute story. :D
Aw, this was adorable! I'm not one for the Jonas Brothers but I thought this was well written and well thought out. I loved the concept and I thought you wrote this really well! <3
I agree with turducken on the time line issue, but other than that I love it. The writing style is very capturing and entrancing! Even though I'm not a fan of the Jonas Brithers you did capture my attention and I really enjoyed reading this. THanks for entering!
I'm not really into the Jonas Brothers, and I honestly have to say that if I just came across it on my own, I probably would have clicked away, but it was so fluffy and cute that I can't possibly dislike it! I really enjoyed it!
I'm not going to get into how much I fathom the Jonas Brothers, but it wasn't that bad. Your writing style is good, and it was cheesy, yet romantic. Good job.