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  • oxford comma.

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    Conversation Following a Shower

    I like the tone.
    My favorite lines:

    Not small, but smaller.
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    "Dreams don't scar your arms."

    Go Ask Alice

    I liked this one a lot. I think how you wrote it, and the analogies {correct word?} added to the interesting aspect.
    My favorite lines:

    “Well, at least we’re at the same fucked up tea party.” Ryan muttered. “I think the caterpillar is probably jealous of you right now.”

    “You’re the Doormouse.”
    “I said the Doormouse was my favorite. I’m not the Doormouse.”
    “Then who are you?”
    “I don’t think I’ve ever been to Wonderland.”
    “Baby, you are Wonderland.”
    January 1st, 2008 at 08:52am
  • yoghurt.

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    Usually I don't comment on your stuff.
    Because its good. Better than good... great.
    And I'm crap compared to it.
    But I read all of it.
    This is amazing.
    Dreamworlds. I've being living in one ever since I can remember.
    There's no coming back, is there? But it's better, much better.
    You erase the line between prose and poetry, so keep on going.
    January 1st, 2008 at 12:46am
  • the endless.

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    They were both really beautiful. Honestly I didn't comment on this earlier because I always feel inadequate commenting of your work because it's so amazing.

    But yeah, they were beautiful, you're an amazing writer.
    December 31st, 2007 at 11:46am
  • folie a dru.

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    New part.
    Go Ask Alice.
    Reviews and comments are love?
    December 31st, 2007 at 11:38am
  • folie a dru.

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    New story.
    Vignettes, drabbles, oneshots. Things that happen in Dreamworld.
    Dreamworld changes so often I thought it was pointless to try and write a continuing story.
    This is "non-fiction fiction".
    Meaning it happened, but not physically. Just up here. -taps forehead-

    Happy reading!

    xoxox
    -Dru
    December 31st, 2007 at 05:49am
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