Sick or Sane - Comments

I really, really liked this.

I'm just as weird as you with my writing :)

They didnt even get busy. :(
It would be cool if he was a teenager but I doubt that would happen.

Anyways the summary was coolio.
And it was like killer, creepy and insane in a big pot of crazy.

This is creeeeepy :D I love etttt

This is quite a good one! I don't really have much to say, because the elements come together rather seamlessly. Layout is good, dialogue is good, plot is good, concept is good. It's also a bit of an unusual focus, being from the killer's perspective.

The only thing I would really mention is that breaking each chapter up into lots of little bits can at times make it seem fractured. It's not that there's anything wrong with having small, 'mini-chapters', but the transition from each one to the next just kind of happens, rather than occurring on cue. If you fleshed this out a bit more, that might work better.

But other than that, I think you've done a good job here. Well done!

I actually liked it.
It was sadistic, in an extremley amazing way.
I love it.
The summary creeped the hell out of me, but it was amazing.
Update soon! :3

That creeped me out!! 0.0 (That's good though.)
I really loved the atmosphere you added to this. It made it all the more creepy.
Very good.

I love that this has an eerie atmosphere to it. The first chapter is amazing-I loved it. There was this one line I liked in particular, it was also in the summary page; I looked into her eyes and saw fear clouding them. I found that oddly comforting. To have her yelling, begging me not to kill her.

I felt like...God.--Brilliant. Just awesome.

At first I thought the italic part was him having a flashback, but I soon realized it was him dreaming. This is really a great start.

I really enjoyed reading this,
and I'm pretty sure thats
because your character is
kind of sadistic, which I love.
I hope you update soon because
I'd definitely read it, xoxo.

The banner picture you used creeped me out, I'm not gonna lie. XD
This was really good, a lot of people suck at writing scary stories, and you are most definitely aren't one of them.
Great job. :]

Okay, so that was like creepy crazy. The part with 'I felt like God' that was intense. I loved that line. This was really good. The layout needs some major work, but I really really loved the short. It had a lot of emotion and I'm glad. A lot of people try to do these creepy stories and they never get the emotions but you did a really good job.

Wow, the summary sounds pretty great. I think it fits perfectly with the picture there. It already gives you that sense of horror and uneasiness. I’m usually not a fan of fantasy font, but it fits in pretty nifty right there. I’m not a fan of the layout, but that’s not that big of a problem.

Just by reading the first sentence in the story, I’m like ‘Woah, prostitute!’ They’re usually the first ones to go in movies and life, so I’m assuming that she’s probably the one in the picture. Bill sounds pretty sick and desperate by the way. X]

Ugh, rape. Nasty topic. D:

Woah, it’s weird how powerful Bill feels. Maybe that’s what drives people to kill and stuff like that; they like to know that are in control of the situation.

Total mindfuck at the end! It was all just a dream.
--

I really enjoyed this. It had a complete twist ending that I wasn’t expecting. I also liked how there was a small repetition of God. I wasn’t the biggest fan of the layout, but that’s not that important, the content is. And I thought the story was pretty great. I didn’t see any mistakes or anything. Great job!

That's freaking weird. I like it.

/crappycommentiscrappy.

Dr.

;O.
Jeez, I would feel so awkward if I woke up from a dream like that,
so..messed up and twisted.
But I like it.
And the layout is nice, so don't worry about it sugarplum<3

This was great, keeping writing, you're very good.

Woah, that dude sure has some messed up dreams.

But really, this was so amazing. I sure didn't expect the ending at all!

I loved it, really.

Good job

Totally mind-boggling. Like....ugh. But it was really good. I'm just a little shell shocked. Haha, but that happens sometimes. Great writing. I loved this.

<3
Lauren

This was amazing.
It was creepy, twisted, sick, and insane.

Haha. All jokes aside, I loved this. It was realistic, and I felt like I could see it playing in my head like a movie.

Good job :)

I am so confused.
So wait, he didn't kill the chick?
Or he did but got away with it?
SO CONFUSED.

But I like it. Horror, I do. The way you describe his emotions.
Maybe you could've delved a LITTLE more into what he was thinking.
You know, I mean, he's probably thinking a lot.
ANYWAYS, THIS CRACKWHORE LIKES IT.
:D

I like the layout, the picture freaked me out a bit but I think that was the point.
I like the way you set out the situation and established the characters feelings and emotions. It's very well put and I thought that this was scary, which is always good. ;)

This story didn't exactly freak me out (I watch Criminal Minds 24/7), but it did interest me.
When I found out this guy was a doctor, I died a little bit inside. It made me think. When I start thinking . . . It's just not good.
Then, when I found out it was a dream, I felt like a weight had been lifted off my shoulders.
And then he said that it was what he wanted to do and I was like . . . Shit.

I liked the layout. Kind of weird, but it was nice and crazy- fits the story. xD
<3

It was scary.
Dude, not many stories freak me out.
But this seriously did.
I'm never going to be a hooker. XD
If that's what the chick was. o.o