From Beyond The Grave - Comments

i began screaming out loud, "DON'T TOUCH THE TUBE, YOU DUMMY!!!!" around the point when Jada got the call. good foreshadowing there. it was a great way to begin the story with pulling something from further into the story and using it as a beginning. it leaves readers wondering how everything will lead up to that very point.

i also am fascinated by how the zombie epidemic is beginning. normally it's always some mess-up on a scientist's part, but this one began when the fish were contaminated right? i love the banner/layout pics at the top...

but, it does seem you have a few grammatical errors, just a few. but they turn off grammar nuts like me when we're reading through a story. a few spelling errors and so on. nothing that would be groundbreaking to the story if editted.

i sort of have to agree that the summary was a bit long-ish. i don't care much for lyrics in summaries, but hey, if that's how you wanted your summary to be, then keep it that way. just make sure the summary leaves readers with questions so they feel more inclined to read the story and follow it.

anyways. great story so far. it's a very creative story, so i hope you continue to write it. :)

Ooooo, the layout is so creepy! And it really makes me think: Warning: Awesome story ahead. Yep, that's right. Layouts speak to me XD

The summary was superb! I love how it's all poem like and how it gives off a mixture of sad, horror, and a mysterious feeling. I seriously am subscribing to your story! =)

Ooo, I love the first chapter! However (only my opinion here) I feel that if you made the first part a prologue, it would be much more interesting. =) I love how you already have us introduced to the characters and how you totally had us hooked with the amazing detail here.

=O I didn't know we were allowed to use links in our stories! Aha, cool!

I can't wait to read more and I'm totally subbing so I can come back and read! <3

this is wicked killer so far!
*subscribes*

I enjoyed this a lot, actuall!! Didn't think I would, because I don't like the layout and the lyrics at the beginning turned me off of the story because there's a lot of them, and I dunno, I just don't think they should be there.

But yes, I liked the plot and everything. I kinda wish you hadn't used the name Curtis, as it reminds me of my ex boyfriend who I hate with every atom in my body, but anyways.

You're very unique, but I can tell you still don't have your own style yet, I don't think. That's not bad though, it'll come in time and then you'll be even better! :)

Great job, keep writing

This is different, which is good.
Like everyone said the summary was too long, I didn't read it. Put up a few lyrics? It would be better. Longer summaries are never good, it sometimes ruins the story.
The plot does sound intersting though I will admit. Everyone has the errors I know, I have mine.
But dont give up, I can see this story going some where. You are a good writer :)

I read all stories on the default layout so it doesn't matter what it looks like, but it was a bit confusing because the lyrics go on forever and it's just a bit bothersome. :/

There are quite a few grammatical errors throughout. I would suggest an editor for your work, so it'll look cleaner and more put together.

It does seem to have an interesting plot, I must say. It's just the linking of images, it kind of bothers me because in published novels, they aren't allowed to do that sort of thing. I mean, they are, but those are picture books and I've always hated picture books since I first started to read.

The story is lacking detail. It goes by so quickly, and I know if you slowed it down and added more detail to the story, it would be a lot better.

I just want to help you improve, and I definitely think you should consider an editor. I'd be willing to do so. PM me if you are interested.

I really don't want to sound mean, man. ):
I hope I wasn't too Debbie Downer-esque.
Have a lovely day, and good luck with this story.

I'm gonna be picky here, just to warn you. :P I'm not trying to be harsh or anything though!

First off, the summary to me seemed kind of long with all of the lyrics, so I didn't end up reading it. Maybe putting just a few of the lyrics in and then linking the rest would be a better idea? It would just be easier than scrolling down a whole bunch to get to the chapter.

The plot seems like it has a bunch of potential, I didn't read it before you rewrote it (which I'm pretty sure you said you did?) but it seems pretty interesting this time around.

The layout did bug me a little bit, but that's because I'm not a fan of white writing on blackish backgrounds. It wasn't too bad though. The zombie hand looking background was pretty cool.

There were a few grammar/spelling errors I noticed:
e were only 12 feet away from the shelter.
You forgot the w in "we".

I push jasmine off, her giggles louder than before
You forgot to capitalize Jasmine.

The fish sticks are locally catched and fried
"Catched" should be "caught" because I'm 98% sure that catched isn't a word.

Other than that, this story seems like it'll be pretty interesting! I haven't really read many zombie stories, so I'm kind of excited to see where this will go. :)

I am liking this so far, I definitely see the connections to the lyrics in the style and storyline, however I will wait until the story is complete and judge it as a whole for the contest. Keep going!! :D

Ohmygosh. I love Creature Feature so much!
They are one of the greatest bands ever, in my opinion.
I used to have a Curtis Rx fanfic, but I took it down, unfortunately.
But I am loving this so far!
Can't wait for more. :)
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