All in Good Time - Comments

I love this, and whilst I'm still trying to work it fully out, the description and dialogue given aid me incredible. First off, I love the banner, and the layout works with it beautifully. The way you write it--with repetition of the amount of time they've spent in the cell--it relays back to the reader the most important parts of the piece.

Very interesting, and I disagree with radiant. I think it flows O.K.

This is really good, just like your other story.
Very interesting, but I have to agree with the two gals above me,
but other then that, really good job (:

I think that this is really good, and it's going places, but I agree with radiant. on how sometimes it doesn't flow. I really like the story though.

Great job!!

<3
Lauren

I really liked this, but, sometimes I felt as if some parts didn't like flow with the rest of the story. :) Other than that, well done.