Fat Girl - Comments

Once again...totally loved the update :)
The one thing I love about this story is that everything you write in it is sooo true. So whether your trying to make this the best story written or not...your still going to cause your going to have many people nodding their heads along to the story saying "I agree with that" or "I totally know how that character feels".
But I'm going to shut up now and just say I love it, I love it, I love it!!

I totally had pancakes with nutella while reading this (:
I really like the part all about being "chubby" when you're little. It's so true!
Bianca's a meanie..
Hah, anyways it flowed beautifully once again,
and if this isn't your best then I'm terrible!
Another great chapter!

Okay so this might seem mean, but I'm a fat girl myself and I have done this before to shut people up, but why doesn't Monica threaten to sit on Bianca's face to shut her up. We're only four chapters in and I want to kill her. Anyways awesome update and can't wait for the next chapter.

I'm most definitely into this story. It's kind of like reading about my previous high school days...no joke!

I will definitely subscribe and keep tabs...and do my best to not be a silent reader (it's really a horrible habit of mine).

I love this story. considering that i'm DEFINITELY overwieght, i can completely relate. the descriptions are so realistic and the words are so true. I'm fersure gonna sub! This idea is really fresh and original. It's almost like you took a regular story, and now you're telling it from that "nice, but bigger" girl perspective. keep doing what you're doing, and remember, you will always judge yourself and what you do a lot harsher than others do.

I'm loving Fat Girl so far...
Chocolate bar brand names -- Hershey's, Snickers, Mars Bars, Milky Way, 3 Musketeers, Almond Joy, Mounds, Babe Ruth, Butterfinger, Cadbury Eggs, Goetze's Caramel Creams, Crunch Bars, Dove Bar, Reese's, Heath Bar.

That's all I can think of right now. Keep updating; everyone's loving this story.

I love this story so far. Totally subscribed, great work =)

Awesomeness! xD
Monica ruleees!
Hurry up and update.

Alright, this story was. . . Very good. I'm still a bit on the fence about it, so I'm not going to be like, "OH MY GOD! I LOVED IT!" But I did really enjoy it. I thought it was very original, I like the idea, and I like your writing style.

The only reason I'm on the fence is because I don't think a lot of the character's actually personality has been shown yet, and I'm big for the psychological connections in stories.

That being said, the only way to get to know the character better, is to keep reading. XD So, I definitely will be.

You've got a great story and idea going here. Keep it up!

I had chocolate today. And the bananas in the banner are making me hungry. Not fair. D:

Once again, this is utterly amazing. It could be longer though, but it's still amazing nonetheless. I don't have much to say, unfortunately, but I'm pumped for the next chapter. Who could be the shark? :o

And once again, I'm blown away from your pure amazing skills at writing.
You use metaphors, similes and comparisons. No one does that anymore.
I love this story, :D

Dangerous waters where each must fend for their lives, people may swim in packs but who knows who will turn and rip one’s fins to shreds.
I love metaphors <3

The stares were almost like claws, slowing digging into her skin and ripping apart her flesh as if she was an Aero bar.
And now you use similes. Do you want to me to die from this beauty!?

Baby, there’s a shark in the water.
LIVE EVERY WEEK LIKE IT’S SHARK WEEK!
Okay, now that that’s over—I love you <3

Your similes, metaphors, and imagery are enchanting.
I just pictured everything vividly, and yes, I'm glad Monica has a friend. :D
The chocolate bar references are making me hungry.
(As if the layout picture with the pancakes isn't enough. Mhmm.)

My favourite part of chapter three:
The giggles caused by malicious commentary echoed through her mind and pounded against her skull, as if the reflection in the mirror weren’t punishment enough.

This may be one of the few lines in a story that make me feel as if there's
a knife in my stomach; twisting further and further until it disappears within.
She's such an intelligible girl and it shows with how you made her thought process operate.

That was another excellent chapter (:
It was heartwarming to know Monica found a friend!
I'm eager to read the next chapter.

Hershey Kisses, Twizzlers, Twix, Kit Kat, Skor, Crunch..

Ho bag, when you be thanking me, I be Isadora Pierce. Understood?
Or else I'll cutcha ass. Comprehend this, little lady?!

Anyway.
I keep feeling like someone's going to bite that poor girl in the ass. Like, bad. LIKE A SHARK, AR AR AR. Poor thing. I just wanna get her some Jenny Craig.

I love how at the beginning of the chapter you talked about the life at highschool. More like how so many adults will lie to an student saying that their years they spend at highscool will be the best ones ever. It's such a lie. I was told that many times, and it's nothing but a big fat lie.
Other than that - great chapter!!!
Looking forward to more!!
And chocolate bar...hmmm...Twix? Coffee Crisp? Reeses Pieces? Oh Henry?
Dunno...I had to look in the cupboard XD

Holy crap! This story is awesome! I definitly subscribed to it and can't wait for the next update.

Where to start? This story is awesome :)
you write really well, and you actually know how to spell and use grammer correctly. kudos for you!
haha.
Please update soon!
*subscribes*

Heehee.<3 Guess who found Gabby's updates? ;) She's been hiding things from me apprently, aha. <3

I really do love your way of writing dearie. :) You're like Mibba's trooper. xD "Oh no, you didn't go there." "You're right, Gabby did. :D" <3 Don't get me wrong, I love it.<3

You manage to make this totally (sometimes) touchy subject into this epic little story that I love. Your detail has a hand in that. ;) Everything else amazing about your writing comes second to that, heehee.<3

I like how the characters has accepted herself, but it still feels like she's super duper sad and bitter about everything. D: </3 It just breaks my heart.

Moar? :D
Because I love you more than Google? <3

(AW, you wrote a story about me?) xD Cue the flailing smiley. \o/ \o/ \o/

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Lemme just say that I love the layout and summary. It's unique and something you never see.

=/ At least she's, like... OK with it? Is that it? I dunno. First paragraph makes me feel shitty 'cos I say I'm chubby. >.> *Hugs Monica*

She didn’t try to stash it in her underwear drawer along with the wrappers of devoured snickers and mars bars. That has me sold. I'm marrying you and this story shall be our baby.

Aw. <|3 This is chipping away at my heart, dammit.

Aaaaand the last sentence has killed me.

Thanks.

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<3 This was brilliant because there is nothing else like it.

No grammar or punctuation mistakes. Everything was simply flawless.