This story is excellent. It's written well, great plot, characters are developed, the whole shebang. BUT. My favorite part are your author's notes. Seriously. You crack me up.
I love this story like Monica loves eating and James. Even though some chapters are pretty depressing-like, I love how you still make it easy to relate to her, even if you're not fat. :3
I'm applying for beta, but I don't know how it'll go. I'm already editing some other peoples' stories, so if you need anything, HOLLAAAAAAA AT YO GIRL.
This story. It's utterly amazing. Depressing because it's like I'm reading the story of my life, but still amazingly written. I do hope you update soon.
I hope you know you're a fabulous writer. :3 its so hard to find competent writers these days I hope you also know I'm so happy I found your story! If you can find the time you should definitely update it soon :D
I like your take on it. I was expecting you to start with her being miserable and complaining about how fat and "disgusting" she was but I really appreciated that you didn't start like that. You started with her accepting the fact that she was fat and knowing it to be true. I wish more people did that instead of the same of "Fat girl, I hate my life" kind of start. Then again, I haven't read but one chapter.
YOU UPDATED! So happy. But so sad and depressing. I feel so bad for Monica. I can empathize so much because I feel that way around people too. :'( Poor girl.
Whoa.. 150 000 neopoints and this story, that's impressive. So now that you have captured me in your story. Do I start to run and hope to lose weight, or do I perch here waiting for the next chapter?
JAMES LOVE HER I JUST KNOW IT OKAY this story is really amazing oh my gosh it's emotional and like Katie_Bugg said, real, powerful, and bold. PLEASE UPDATE SOON.
Living in America, a place bred on fast food and cocaine, she isn’t the only one sporting that pudgy stomach and thunder thighs.
My absolute favorite line on Mibba currently. Real, powerful, and bold. Well done. Those three words would describe the entire story. I love it. I'm still reading but I felt the need to comment already. Chapter 3 and 4 need to be looked over with the typo/grammar/spelling comb again but otherwise seems good in that area. Love this.
This story is literally amazing. You capture the essence of the character very well. She is very relatable to bigger girls in society, how they are made fun of and how they feel. Just from the summary you had me hook and i really didn't need to be reading because i was supposed to be reading my AP US history book but its just really good. Being as though im on the heavier side i can really feel the emotions. this story is so good im thinking of showing it to my mom and being like "this story is awesome, this is exactly how i feel on the inside. read it!" I really cant wait to see what you do with this and hopefully you update soon (: