Welcome to the Family - Comments

Oh my gosh.
That was hilarious. xD

You don't need so much exclamtion points and I don't know what the plot is really. I read the first two chapters and I'm lost.
Anyway, this needs a lot more descriptions and emotions and it could make a good story.
Also try and develop the plot a bit better.
But overall it is a good story.

Ahaha at the "You're pulling a Matt" xD
And the part where Zacky fell asleep on the floor...I was lmao'ing.
But I feel so bad for her. :((((((((

Ahhh! That's my Twinnie thing, you dork! lmao. I <3 you, Danii. And I heart this story.

this is sick. love ya bothhh (:

I hope all of you know that I was all smiles when I signed on and I saw we had comments, thank you guys so much!

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Emily! <3

Hmm nice.
It was a bit longer, but I only read the first two chapters.
But, it's nice, it's not cliché and all that good jazz.

I agree with Satan's Syns it definately isn't one of those "Ommgz I like, totally met my brother's Bff and we like totally fell in loooovvveeee." I like it, my favorite part was when Emily was talking to Brian about how he tried to convince her Johnny and Jimmy had a thing and he was related to the mr. Clean guy. I busted a gut at that one. <33

What did she DO?!?!? and WHY was she 3 hours away?

Update...? L(^O^)

Thank you guys so much for you're feedback, especially the constructive criticism, we will definitely take everything you've told us into account!

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Emily.=)

I really like this story!! I like how it's not one of those, "I met my older brother Matt's bff and we got in a relationship" kind of story. It's really written well, also. :)

I'm sort of lost as to what the plot of the story is. Maybe that's just because it's the first chapter. You guys need a lot more description, I think it'd do wonders for this story. (: Also, you don't need a million exclamation marks to make a point. Things are self explanatory, if you're mad, you're mad! <---See?

Uh, i read the summary, well part of it, and im gonna subscribe, and probably read it soon!

um. so the authors note told me not to comment, but I DO WHAT I WANT :P (: such an epic chapter. you guys aren't doing anything wrong. stop worrying so much about comments and subs! this story is epic. write it for the fact of loving it (:
so. epicness. i hope Danii is okay ): <3

rahhh love it :D and i got a shout out! wooot woooooot (;
PS christine and I are doing a collab as well....eventually...

awesome, as always (: just subscribed :D

i need chapter 3 now... lol damn, matt's a psycho in this one. xD

SV SuN!

i like it so far. please update soon! AWESOMENESS coming my way when you update (yes, i relize that was lame)

SV SuN!