so i think i have avoided every reading a twlight fan fiction until this point and i actually did read the entire thing. uuummm one thing that got me was the frist couple chapters she is really anti- forks and her family and then suddenly she gets along with everyone (including her brother) and its like her personality does a sudden 180 without any explanation. just something to think about to keep your story consistent :)
As a general rule, I avoid Twilight fanfiction, but comment swap has sent me this story so I tried my hardest to get into it. There are a few things you should fix, like the small errors in your grammar and changes in tenses.
I don't mind swearing at all it is an everyday thing for me so yeah I didn't really think about it like that. It would've been hilarious. and thank you for commenting and subscribing. I'm working on the next chapter I will probably have it up sometime this weekend.
just a side note; I really like the story! But at the end of chapter three it would've been hilarious if you added in Embry's P.O.V too, it just being ...FUCK!
xD sorry if you don't like swearing or anything, but I just thought it would've been funny.
Thank you for commenting on my other two stories nobody ever commented on them so I just kinda stopped writing them I had no inspiration to continue. So thank you so very much for doing so I'm going to start the new chapter and hopefully have it out sometime this week.