Burn. - Comments

This story is a little strange and I very much like it. I also like you're writing style and of course you're layout is pretty too.

This is so beautiful and heart-revering. (if that's even a word. o.o)

Brody & Julia are just the most adorable thing in the world to me, I don't know why yet. I feel so dumb, because until like Chapter 4 I thought Brody was a girl. It makes more sense now that I know he's not.. I don't have much to say because it's 3:30 in the morning and I can't sleep anymore and I don't want to be a silent reader so here I am.

At first, I'll admit I was a little confused,well not confused, but trying to predict where the story was heading.
It was really well written and just a great storyline.

I'm gonna subscribe and I hope it's updated soon.
:)

I love this story. <3
And this chapter was really, really cute.

Julia and Brody are so adorable. (:

^ Page two, btw. (:

I miss this. ;___;

I'm going to leave you a real comment, even though you haven't updated. Because all of mine are caps locked and they don't honestly tell you anything other than I love you and that I want you to update. All of which are true, but I mean, come on. It's nice to log on and see a long comment about how you write, how much your reader loves this story, and who their favorite characters are and why.

So, here goes.

This is my favorite story of yours next to Scapegrace. Sorry, that one still has the lead, and I think it's because of Opal's uniqueness. But this is a close second. I love this story because it's original, and by original, I mean it REALLY is original. Not just the characters themselves, but the whole plotline and story in general. It's something I've never seen, or read, on mibba. And also, it was a really cute layout. (:

My favorite character is Cameron. He's funny, sassy and a good friend. I also love the little detail about his little sisters loving up on Brody, because that was cute and funny all at once! :D

My favorite part, so far, was when he first saw Julia in the classroom. I thought it was wrote out perfectly, without too much detail, but more of his thoughts about how she was there, right before his very eyes. Like a magic trick or something. I don't know. I just really enjoyed how you wrote it. (:

Anyway.
I'll see you later, homeboy.
Because we be goin' homecoming dress shopping.

<3

i stumpled upon this story a few minutes ago and i love it (: please tell me there going to talk or something is gonna happen! don't let her just leave! update soon (:

I just wanna tell you that this is one of the coolest things I've read in a really-really long time^^ you may have figured out that I'm not so good at leaving constructive writing tips (I don't even write, I'm purely a reader) but I hope... I dunno, maybe you'll update faster? *hinthint*

I WANT YOU TO UPDATE RIGHT THIS VERY SECOND.
AND YES I AM GIVING YOU A CAPS LOCK COMMENT, BECAUSE YOU GAVE ME TWO.
AND I LOVED THEM DEARLY.
DO YOU LOVE THIS ONE? I HOPE YOU DO.

ANYWAY. FOR REALZ. GO UPDATE. HOE.
I'LL EAT YOU IF YOU DON'T.
AND THEN... YEAH.

/caps.

^ Ah, oops. I forgot to edit that part out of the draft for the first chapter. Thank you for informing me!

This is really good. The layout and banner were just lovely just like the plot.

The only thing I really found confusing was the fact that you stated that he had a brother in chapter one [a bedroom for me, a bedroom for my younger brother] and in the second chapter it says that he doesn't have any [I didn’t have any brothers or sisters.]. I just thought I should inform you on that.

Wow, I've just read and I love your story. Finding authors as good as you on Mibba isn't something that happens all that often, and although I'm normally a silent reader, when I find something like this I have to say something.

I love the originality of the story, lot of 'original fiction' on this site really isn't all that original and it's a breath of fresh air to read something that's original and both meaningful and as beautifully written as this.

I'm looking forward to finding out what happens in the next chapter.

OMG. I'm in your author's note! And so is my new story! <3

My favorite part of this chapter was your description of Julie when he'd first seen her in class. It wasn't like, over exaggerated and it didn't have very much detail, but I think that I liked it because it was so vague. The picture in my mind matched with the words you wrote out. From the one leg behind the other to her necklace. She just sounds so sad and so cute that I want to hug her. :3

Cameron is officially my homedawg. Gurrrl, he be trippin'. And it sounds just like me when I see that girl in our school seizure all the time. Only I cry out of fear and Cameron swears. Teehee(:

Anyway, long story short, I want you to update.
So, go do that. Right now.
Literally, this very second. Do it.
Or I'll eat you. o_o

I swear I will.

<33333

P.S: UPDATE CHEER AND LASTING DREAMS, TOO.

Honestly this story is like wow, you`re a really good writer and it`s kinda hard to find those these days, I love your story so much and the prolougue I can relate. Sorry but I don`t have anything else to say but I`m subscribing cause it`s so amazing,

HNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNGH.

That is how this chapter made me feel.
No other words need to be spoken.
Because this - this word, this sound - just explains it all.

You complete me. <3

This is so gorgeus and emotional!
The layout is amazing too!

There was a white light that rang from one ear to the other, <-- I don't understand this. How does light ring? It's not a sound?

First off, I absolutely love the layout with the vintage background and everything. And the banner is simply to die for.

Your descriptions are amazing, and so is your characterization. It's like what astontheowl said - it's tough for girls to write a true to heart male character but you've done it so well here.
He's so realistic, especially when we get to read his thoughts and see what he does.
I'm so curious to see what happens with him and that girl Julia. This really is such an interesting, different, and intriguing story you have here (:

Great job!

This is absalutly stunning.

First off, the layout is lovely, and your summery is written very nicely. I also like the Times New Roman font too, it adds to the tone of the story.

Second off, your characters are swell. I can really feel the pain he feels is in such good detail, it takes my breath away.

I know this might seem foolish of me, but I didn't even read the second chapter yet, I just wanted to comment after I was finished with the first one.

But yes, well done. I'm definitely looking forward to read more in the future. <3