uh oh She did drugs Don't let her get hooked PLEASE DON'T LET HER GET HOOKED!!!! Actually Do whatever the fuck you want to do with this story IT'S YOURS!!!!!!!
First, try getting a beta. I only read the summary and caught a lot of mistakes, lack of punctuation, and so on. Also, change the layout. The font makes it impossible to read, and the brightness makes my eyes hurt. Try simple colors like black and white and gray, don't use bright colors.
I'd like to read this, it just needs a little work. :D