Temptation Not Included - Comments

To begin, I want to say that I love the layout. It is very easy to read, and the banner is so pretty. I also don't have to squint to read the story, which is a huge plus for me considering how bad my eyes are.

The length of your updates are absolutely incredible and I have to applaud you for that. Most of the time, I'm lucky if I can get out updates that are even half of that. In the first chapter, I really liked Meru's character, and the conversations between her and Dimitri. You are very good at describing things, and characterization with your characters. Nice work!

Well written, even the filler chapter. I could deal with a little less length, but it's honestly alright. Lends itself to the story in a way, and the chapters would seem incomplete without all of the descriptions.

Other than that I will say that I like your characterization and will continue to read the story as updates come due.

this is really super good; i love the way its written! :)

Yey..good update :]

Only one comment before me? What the heck..this is a good story, I really like it and it deserves more comments. I'll try to comment if I don't forget :]
Update soon please!

Devin.
If you don't add chapters to this, I will hunt you down and blow up your house.

Don't make me do that.