Fragile Beings - Comments

I love this :)
Please update soon

Absolutely beautiful:3
I really hope Asher isn't going to do something horrible to Darcy, I wouldn't be able to bear it.
You write this story so perfectly and I cannot wait for another update. This has quickly become one of my favourite stories on Mibba.

ugh.
they just needa get to bumpin' uglies real soon.
PLEASE update soon, I gotta have some more of that Asher yummieness c:

I have fallen in love with this story.
There is so much suspense! I can't wait to see what happens.
I'm going to go insane while I wait.
" I’m an example of how children shouldn’t grow up to be."
Favourite line so far <3

Wonderful update that filled my heart with happiness :)
I can't wait for more:)

Lovedd it! Update soon! (:

loveeee this

Wow this is a really impressive story! I hope you update soon! It's very good!

Finally! Why can't I have an Asher? Haha.

I parked my care a humble two story brick house.

Darcy turned her body towards me. “You don’t have to ask for permission you know,” spoke before I could gather completely gather my thoughts. <---------I'm just confused on that one.

Asher is so. damn. cheeky.
I love him, oh my god.
PLEASE update soon, this chapter was adorable! c:

I am very interested to see what happens next. c;
I just want Asher to love me down... is that weird?
or no?
No?
Cool.
He can just, y'know, love me down. in a bed. in a closet. in a bathroom. in a car. in a library. in a... nail polish bottle. a pencil case. I really don't care, as long as he loves me down.
Anyways.
This story intrigues me! It's just so... interesting, and it just sucks me in this whirlwind of a love life.
I really do wonder what Asher's up to, though.
There's something really wrong about him, but the problem is that it's just so right.

Ahhh this is love. Love that I WANT. I just read all the chapters and I WANT MORE. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE. I love love love this story and I'm totally subscribed. I love everything about Asher though you warn that he's gonna be a dick. But who cares, I love jerks that are completely hot :) Actually I take that back, I don't always. But this is an exception :)

Action! Action, action, action... Okay I really liked this chapter.. :D And I agree though school has started for me. It is boring right now. Anyways another lovely update :)

Chapter One:

So the layout is extremely cute, I love it a lot actually. It's very light and airy and you can automatically tell that it's a love story. I am absolutely smitten by the title. It's fantastic and it makes me smile, just like chapter one did.

I noticed a few grammar errors, mostly concerning commas, but I make a lot of those.
For example: "Then locked inside, buried underneath a cage of rib bones, blood and other shit lays the keeper of truth. "
Rib bones to me sounds awkward and it makes the sentence sound choppy, and it should be lies not lays.

There are some others, but they were minor. I love the main character. His personality and way of describing the human body and how it reacts to certain things is captivating. I loved how you explained the brain, but then I saw it was a quote... hahah but nice use of quote!

The whole chapter flowed quite nicely, especially when you repeated the Butterflies and Heartbreak line. I'm extremely curious and my reading won't stop due to this comment swap, so I'll have to catch up before you update!

Haha, I would love to tell you all about how Darcy Addams became my world but instead you’ll be far more interested on how I f*cked shit up. That is such a funny sentence in my opinion. Don't all guys tend to f*ck everything up?

The first chapter was interesting for being a filler/intro. Although, he isn't 'my type' the main character seems quite the catch. I wonder what is going to happen between the both of them.

Good job so far :D

I really angry that Asher did something stupid over the summer. I hope he decides to forget his plan and veer completely of course with Darcy because I think they'd be pretty hot together. I'm listening to Bad Romance right now and all I can think is DARCY AND ASHER COULD WRITE A BAD ROMANCE. Oh yeah they could, but bad in that really good kind of way.

At first when I started reading this, I thought it would be one of those creepy and stalkerish kind of deals, but I was surprised to see that it was just a strong fascination kind of thing that turns into a lighthearted romance. It's nice, and it made me smile. I like the way that your narrator slowly tells the story of how he discovered Darcy, and I love how the story doesn't rush along. I've never been one for timeskips all over the place, so it's good that this is set at a nice, decent pace. I also like how you incorporated the whole concept of human anatomy and 'how to be human' into this, and it's just an incredible piece. Good job.

I got so behind on updates! I was reading the most recent chapter and was all HUH? WHAT'S GOING ON? And then I realized I hadn't read the previous one.

THIS IS HOW I FEEL ABOUT MR. HOLLAND:



But Asher handled it very well done so this is for him:



AND I LOVE ASHER, HE IS SO ADORABLE. THERE WHOLE BEACH ESCAPADE WAS ADORABLE.

Omg, you updated this! Yay! I actually got a notification of it, but since I wasn't at the computer, I couldn't leave a comment straightaway. Anyways, I'm happy that I got to claim this again :D I'm still in love with how Asher is observing Darcy from afar; it's even more lovely how it doesn't seem creepy in the least. A lot of stories like this end up getting insanely creepy by the first chapter, but yours doesn't. I love how he basically takes us through her day without her actually noticing him; again, this observation concept is very adorable, I think. It really allows the reader to get into Darcy's head, but also into Asher's. He definitely sounds like a cute and I'm excited to read the rest. Amazing job, once again! <333

Do you mind that I do this?

Very quickly she draped her arms around my neck, holding my close to her.

Of course it took me only two steps to treed through the water and grab her by the waist.