I Won't Say I'm in Love - Comments

I was a little apprehensive reading this mostly because I've generally avoided reading anything Twilight related if at all possible. It's jut not for me. However, the first couple paragraphs have me HOOKED. Her home life sounds crazy and it's obvious why she wants to escape. I can't wait for the story behind her mother getting locked away!

I have noticed a few grammatical errors, but nothing too major.

I do think the sentences are a little stilted, maybe you could tweak them a little to have them flow better. "I walked down the stairs through the living room to the door. Stepping outside, the noise of Brooklyn filled my ears, and the cool wind hit my face. Now, here I was: standing outside..."

I'm surprised at how trusting Emmett is. Why was he at the airport to begin with? Their banter is cute, though!

I really loved the second chapter. Her panic was clear, and you can really see how beat down she's become. Singing "Smile" as she thinks she's about to die was so heartwrenching. I think a little more description of the forest and environment in general would do wonders for the feel and tone of this story.

Great job otherwise!

I was a little apprehensive reading this mostly because I've generally avoided reading anything Twilight related if at all possible. It's jut not for me. However, the first couple paragraphs have me HOOKED. Her home life sounds crazy and it's obvious why she wants to escape. I can't wait for the story behind her mother getting locked away!

I have noticed a few grammatical errors, but nothing too major.

I do think the sentences are a little stilted, maybe you could tweak them a little to have them flow better. "I walked down the stairs through the living room to the door. Stepping outside, the noise of Brooklyn filled my ears, and the cool wind hit my face. Now, here I was: standing outside..."

I'm surprised at how trusting Emmett is. Why was he at the airport to begin with? Their banter is cute, though!

I really loved the second chapter. Her panic was clear, and you can really see how beat down she's become. Singing "Smile" as she thinks she's about to die was so heartwrenching. I think a little more description of the forest and environment in general would do wonders for the feel and tone of this story.

Great job otherwise!

@ loverboy.
Gee, thanks! I'm actually working on picking it back up soon, so get excited!!

I love it

Omg you're stories are amazing. I love the emotions put into it. There's chapters where it's brought me to tears. Please continue writing this marvelous story. I'm quite addicted to this. Lol best one yet.

Your story is freaking AMAZON!!!!!! Like everytime I read I'm always in my feelings lol well I really do hope you continue this cause its just wonderful!!!!!!!!!!

Love it!! It took me awhile to get around to read it but I finally did. Can't wait for an update. Thou I hate Nate can't wait for Jake and her to finally be together. Oh and I absolutely love the way you portrayed Paul, 'In case I haven't told you, you're welcome to have sex with me anytime.' I know I'd love too!!

its amazing

Good God Nate, why are you so amazing with that whole Fiji date idea??
I can't stop but think that he only "forgave" her because he realised he had done worse then what she did... I love 95% of who Nate is, I seriously love this character but I hate him for cheating and not telling her anything, I really hope he does tell her the truth...
Loved this chapter. Hope you update soon!! :)

Sara.

Didn't his sister say he was cheating on her anyway? I'm pretty sure that's the only reason her forgave her after she said that he'd do the same. Someone PLEASE TELL CALYPSO HER BOYFRIEND IS A DOUCHE SO SHE WON'T BEAT HERSELF UP ugh. This isn't fair :(

Oh wow this was fucking brilliant!! I loved it!! The whole comparasin of calypso and norma pulled me in soo good it was like it could feel what she was going through too I almost cried along with her. I was in all honesty was sad this chapter was over I cant wait to read more.

WOOOOOOOW!
Oh bloody hell, 26 chapters and she still hasn't realised they're meant to be?!
Loved this chapter, loved it, loved it, loved it!!!
I cannot wait for the next couple chapters, can't wait to see what she'll do when she gets back home.

- Sara

WOAAAAAAAH THAT WAS SPICY! The almost-kiss, then the real kiss in the next chapter. Ugh Loved it. I saw Breaking Dawn part 2 last Saturday and since then my need for Jacob black Fanfics has skyrocketed, so this is just perfect. I can't even imagine how they're gonna act when they get back. So ready!

I AM IN LURVE WITH THIS STORY! pleeeaaase update! :p

love love love LOVE this story!!! its such an amazing story that i was hooked adn reaad it allll in one day :) cant wait for more!!! im glad that thir relationship is starting to move somewhat? lol

Yay!!! :)

More!! I'm so happy you updated!'! I love this story!!!

Do you understand how much I love this story? It is just so fantastic I can't even begin. Their (Calypso and Jacob) relationship is just so tangible it's I sane. The fact that you made Calyspo have such a vivid background story is so refreshing because I never see that anymore. <- reasons why I continue to read and comment :)
Now for the chapter. Nate is a horrible dog and I wish I could hurt him. How could you do that to her? Ugh I almost felt bad for him before for being in this mess and being bound to get hurt but now? He can just go. Jacob is so sweet with the doll and the car! They have so much more value than a funky set of jewelry. I really want the Seattle trip to work, and I'm so ready for that chapter. Pleasssse try to update sooner, I don't expect speedy chapters. But yeah I really want the Seattle chapter lol :)))

You're bloody back! Holy Shit!!! Hiiiiii!!! Hello, how've you been?! :-D
That last part pulled at my heart strings, such a beautiful scene. Why aren't they together yet?
And God, remembering the fact that Nate cheated on Caly kills me, really. :c
I'm so glad you're back to writing this story, love. :D

- Sara

I'm from comment swap. The layout I personally don't think is that great. I think it could be a little better. This story is well written, there are few spelling/grammar errors which is a plus to a story. Your character is really neat, but I just don't understand her. I'm not a Twilight fan at all, and I probably wont continue reading this, but it's good so far so I don't think you should stop writing. Good luck and update for your fans! :)