First of, the layout is really simple, not sure I really cared for your choice of font. The ending was fantastic, really a shocker to say the least. I noticed that you used the wrong "they're" "their" "there" consistantly, I suggest you really read over it before you post something. Also, you kept spelling "wiping" as "whipping". They are all easy fixes and I applaud you on the plot and character development. Great job!
March 11th, 2011 at 01:54am