I totally love this chapter! It seems that your writing style fits my reading style. Awesome. And Marbie! Well, you've just made her my favorite! Keep up the good work :)
I loved this chapter. More importantly, the Facebook reference xD Then again, Jay & Marbie's stand-off was very amusing too, made me fall off my chair once or twice.. ;)
I love you. You are awesome. Hands down awesome, you are. Oh, and I totes agree with silk tea. up there about the Potter reference. XD
Right, well. I love how you mentioned Facebook (which, by the way, is a word on my computer, but only when I capitalise it. When it's uncapitalised, my computer decides it's not a word) in this chapter, 'cos it shows how modern and how real the characters are. Aaaaaaaanyway, before I go off spewing meaningless and real deep shit about philosophy an' all that jazz, I shall end this comment. Ta-ta, m'dear!
Oh lord Marbie, you crazy girl you. So, I won't lie but that Harry Potter reference totally made me think of what may happen between the three friends, though I'm probably totally wrong but it totally made me think of what's coming. bUMBUBMBUMMM. Where's miss Bluewood?! Has she died?
Also, “Yeah, things are getting really serious between me and Amy.”
“Amy and I,” Marbie corrected almost automatically.
It actually would be 'me and Amy' because if you were to take Amy out of the sentence it would be "Yeah, things are getting really serious with me." Even though it's between let's just say you said with mainly because 'between me' wouldn't work. It wouldn't be "Yeah, things are getting really serious with I."
Hahaha, first base...wait no...second base... wait! gah! I dunno what it is in baseball lingo, but he just got some from his best friend. Ickkkky. Soooooo, I miss Sunny. I figured she'd have seen what happened or something and bring it up. But ah well.
I'm really hooked on this. It's a kind of drug, and it's addictive. The idea is really interesting, and the layout is very pretty. The flow is perfect and the word choice is absolutlely beautiful. I like the title, and Sunny Bluewood is quite, quite cool. I reall love this. I'm subbing.
I really love your humor. You're great at that. This chapter was interesting and I like how much Ash fails at dating--and the fact that he spilled a milkshake all over that girl. I'd just be like...well, fuck. Then I'd probably turn really red and figure out a way to apparate away.
I did notice two spelling errors though. Amy’s bobbing her head and humming to some vaguely familiar Beyonce song, and then she’d talking. 'and then she's talking'.
An odd way of saying ‘hey, wanna go out again next Satday” but I don’t know any better. 'Saturday'.
I really liked how you made this girl into so many nerdy things. I don't actually know anyone who does them all, but its cool. Oh and i really like the part about the milkshake thing :)
This was my favorite chapter so far, actually. Weirdly enough, I really like Amy. More then Sunny right now, in fact. She seems more down to earth and similar to someone I would be friends with for real. I hope we see more of Amy and that Sunny gets nicer :) :)
I haven't commented in a while, but I still love this story. I wish there were more Sunny scenes, but at the same time I don't. Asher seems like an innocent little child, and Sunny is like the person who sends him to a cult that brainwashes him. Ah well. I love it. It makes me think.
I'm loving this! Also, the fact that it was written by a fellow Aussie is just great! :D Its really original, and Sunny isn't your typical Mary-Sue, which I totally love! Keep it up!