Booze, Bongs and Boobs. - Comments

  • chutes too narrow

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    I'll admit, it isn't the first time I've seen this idea and it was a little cliché,
    but it was quite readable and the layout was good (:
    July 7th, 2010 at 04:38pm
  • SNOOKI WAS HERE.

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    MAUHAHA!
    I loved the ending, to chapter one! It actually made me laugh; all, what the fuck?!
    Any ways -
    The writing was brillitant, though I saw some run on sentences, or places where a comma should be.

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    “Mom how much longer?" There should be a comma after mom.
    Florida isn’t exactly what all the postcards propose it to be, there weren’t any sandy beaches ... After be, there should be a period. Just doesn't flow right, for me.

    Well - I hope this comment helped. :D Good story. I'm subscribing - now, off to read the next chapters!
    July 7th, 2010 at 01:31am
  • kizza :D

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    dude update soon plz!!!!!!!
    June 26th, 2010 at 03:45am
  • iwishiwas

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    aww do you keep reposting the same chapter to tear away my excitement?? ): REALLY update soon thank youu
    June 25th, 2010 at 07:31am
  • YourLoveIsGonnaDrown

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    good up date :) but you should update more oftan i had to read it over agian for got what it was about
    June 24th, 2010 at 10:22pm
  • AllBecauseofYou

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    I'd love to see another update! Love your story!
    June 24th, 2010 at 08:02pm
  • Isadora Pierce

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    Even though it's cliche, (the whole 'I'm a girl at a boy's boarding school' and I've never heard of it in real life, you manage to pull it off with your writing style. I like this girls attitude and her obvious distaste towards Florida and her parents. It's easy to relate to and you're doing a great job of bringing the All American teenager out in this. Not to mention, nice title.xD
    June 24th, 2010 at 07:19pm
  • Surrealistfemme.

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    I know, I asked them to but a hooka there, due to the illegal issue.
    June 24th, 2010 at 07:18pm
  • Dark Sinning Rose

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    Whoever made the banner for this story, the picture under "bongs" is inaccurate. That is a hookah not a bong. There is a deference. Hookahs are legal. Bongs are not.
    June 24th, 2010 at 07:12pm
  • crowning.

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    This is good :) It sucks that it's only three chapters though
    June 24th, 2010 at 03:00am
  • Lamesauce

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    hi im ur newest subscriber :) U got a nice story going, dont let it go to a waste :)
    June 23rd, 2010 at 08:47pm
  • Crash Thrusts.

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    I can't wait to read more. :)
    June 23rd, 2010 at 04:44am
  • XtremeFairy

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    This is a really interesting story..I can't wait to read more of it soon. :)
    June 23rd, 2010 at 04:37am
  • Can't Keep Running

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    best girl goes to boys boarding school story I've read! I like how you made her family more famous, it makes her attitude make more sense. I'm subscribing...
    June 11th, 2010 at 04:24am
  • Surrealistfemme.

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    I have a very busy life right now. I am graduating high school and my AP classes are building up on me and I have many deadlines for college. I am sorry, it will be updated.
    March 9th, 2010 at 11:32pm
  • MusicIsLife21

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    I really like this story but you stopped writing it out of nowhere... Is it going to continue or what? I'd really like for it to continue...
    March 9th, 2010 at 02:55am
  • BumbleBree

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    Really really great keep up the good work and update!!
    February 13th, 2010 at 01:14am
  • TheAestheticOutline

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    This story is great so far! :D
    But try to avoid changing tenses so often (i.e from past to present, and vice versa, and stick to just one tense.
    Other than that, it's really good and I'll be looking forward to reading the next chapter! xD
    -Michelle
    February 10th, 2010 at 12:54am
  • JustACupcakeLover

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    Ohh i really like this story :) Updates please
    February 6th, 2010 at 12:09pm
  • sporaticwriter

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    Update soon! Really likes it!! :P
    February 4th, 2010 at 02:52am