January 12th, 2008 at 05:53am
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NO! NO! NO! NO! *smacks self* This isn't how it should be!January 12th, 2008 at 03:11am
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*gulps* I'm scarred...January 11th, 2008 at 11:30pm
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That means a lot thanks!- MCRmy soldier horr:
- i actually hate hannah montana, but this is awesome! i absolutely love this, your going to be the person who gets me into it!
thanks hun,
January 11th, 2008 at 09:38am -
i actually hate hannah montana, but this is awesome! i absolutely love this, your going to be the person who gets me into it!
thanks hun,January 11th, 2008 at 08:37am -
I know I just couldn't keep it a secret any longer!January 11th, 2008 at 06:09am
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At least everyone knows now!January 11th, 2008 at 05:07am
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I know!January 10th, 2008 at 10:30am
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awww miley and nick are so cute XDJanuary 10th, 2008 at 10:17am
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Ok so the bus is double decker(I've always loved them so I had to put it in there)and the whole I am a close friend is so that Miley does not give away her Hannah idenity. Yeah I will be fixing everything else when I finish the entire thing.
Thanks for the help!January 10th, 2008 at 05:28am -
I think that this story would have a lot of potential, but, there's a few things you might want to fix, that would help a lot.
First) Check your past/present pretences, e.g:
"Miley Ray Stewart get down here now! You have no problems with them." Robbie Ray yells up the stairs empathizing the wordyou. 'you'
"No because someone does and that someone does not like them at the moment!"
Mileyyelled yells back at her father.
Your grammar is okay, but you might need to start editing to make proper use of commas, colons, and semi-colons. E.g. Lilly Miley and Oliver should be Lilly, Miley, and Oliver.
As well as, some of this doesn’t make much sense, but maybe you can tell me why? It was confusing.
Miley yelled back at her father. Then going to the Hannah room at the front of the top of the bus. Yet again it had no symbol that it was a Hannah room only that it had a huge closet with designer clothes. She was picking out something to wear when a knock came from the door.
"Come in!" Miley yelled walking back into the room from the closet.
"Who has a problem with us?" the oldest Kevin asked
"Hannah Montana and I am a close friend!" Miley says taking her hair out of the towel.
I’m not quite sure I understand that one?
And…Conjunctions…when combining you are, you want to put it like this, ‘you’re’ not, ‘youre’ It won’t make any sense. As well as ‘don’t’ instead of ‘dont’ and ‘isn’t’ instead of ‘isnt’
This is nothing to be rude, as I’ve said before, I think the story has a lot of potential, I just think that some things need to be fixed. But good luck with your story, and I hope this helped, at least a little bit.January 10th, 2008 at 01:03am -
Great update!January 9th, 2008 at 10:03am
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I knowJanuary 8th, 2008 at 06:01pm
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That update was cute! Those songs are pretty cool!January 8th, 2008 at 12:35pm
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Thank you again!- Not Okay:
- Adorable update! Poor Jake, cough*move on*cough Always thought and always will! XD
I will never be able to say thanks enough!January 8th, 2008 at 11:13am -
Adorable update! Poor Jake, cough*move on*cough Always thought and always will! XDJanuary 8th, 2008 at 10:45am
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Thank you a lot and thanks for supporting the no haters!- mama mia dia!:
agreed. don't hate just because you don't like.- hsmp0pstar:
Stop writing hate stuff on here! If you don't like Hannah Montana then don't read this! It is not like you have to!- xtruexlovexisxdeadx:
- Um, Hannah Montana? Seriously? How old are you?
anyways...
hahahahahaha that last chap. was funny!
January 8th, 2008 at 10:39am -
agreed. don't hate just because you don't like.- hsmp0pstar:
Stop writing hate stuff on here! If you don't like Hannah Montana then don't read this! It is not like you have to!- xtruexlovexisxdeadx:
- Um, Hannah Montana? Seriously? How old are you?
anyways...
hahahahahaha that last chap. was funny!January 8th, 2008 at 10:14am -
Uber cute!January 8th, 2008 at 07:25am
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Great udpate! Stupid that Nick would hide that!January 7th, 2008 at 08:24pm
You'll like the next chapter I swear on my brothers(all of them)lives