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I've only read the first chapter, but it is good!! It would be a lot easier to read if the paragraphs were separated, and there's a few missing letters (like 'n' on the end of 'the' in several places) but I really like your writing style and hope to read the whole series :)

It's an interesting story that the only improvements I can think of to make would be to get a more defining layout and to put spaces between your paragraphs. The spaces help people read the work better on Mibba just with the way writing is portrayed. But other than those two nitpicks, good job :)

It's AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I wish I could write that good!!!!!!!!!!!!!

i read the first chapter... and its FLAWLESS<3 dontt everrr say you dont like itt haha

I like it, even though I've read 2 chapters XD