Lol, really? I thought it kinda sucked :P But like they say the customers always right, but I guess this time it's more like the readers always right ( :
I really like the way your story is going. Maybe you can have a paragraph or flashback where she explains where she previously was? Cause if she's transferred packs, she's gotta have a reason and an emotional excuse as to why. Just giving you ideas. :) Update sooon, I have a great feeling about this story!
ohmygosh, I am in love with this!! TOTALLY SUBSCRIBING and spamming you with comments on updates<3 this is so cute, and adorable yet funny at the same time. I hope you keep up with it!:D