I actually really enjoyed the conflict between them. It was wonderfully played out and felt very real. Also I've never been one for happy stories, I feel more connected to turmoil and chaos.
Even though I did like reading about their downhill, I'm overjoyed to see that he's come back to her.
FINALLY. I feel like banging their fucking heads together. But... TRA LA LA LA LAAAAA. Me thinks that they may get back together >///< That was so well written :3
poor Jac and all that she's been through. she's tough for making it this far without having a breakdown or something. I couldn't imagine the violation of the whole situation. all of those deaths, and none of them were easy- well, death is never easy.
I hope that with her strength so far she's able to come more out of her shell. I hope this whole thing doesn't make her fold into herself, now that she's with someone who cares a lot.
my computer has crashed a few times. after you finishing working on something, you should email it to yourself. that's what I've learned to do! then you have everything saved just in case your computer ever crashes in the future!
I can't wait for more. and interesting explaination. my head's still spinning from this twist! it went from poetry to action and I dig the combo. I'm still trying to catch my bearings but I'm entranced with your story!
Thank you and I'm changing it back. The other ville story was a little predictable maybe so I wanted to shake things up but I was nervous doing that sorry chapters are so late it's not good! Haha buy I have a Finnish seminar paper due and going between two languages hahah i started to write a chapter in finnish. Haha
wowzers. another twist. crazy, but i like it. i did think that this chapter was harder to follow with the flashbacks and underlying tense tone, though. all the same i liked the update. it was not at all what i expected and i loved that.
and you chance the name of the story...that is not a good move... because it will be hard for people who want to read the story... like me LOL... maybe you should add that in your author comment ")
noooooo she can't leave him! and I totally didn't see that twist coming! now I'm eager to find out more of her story and what's really going on with her life and being forced to run away. not going to lie though, as a girl who's lived in Chicago (the city of gangsterism) and driven on the trails of Bonnie and Clyde, I love the whole "living life on the run like a fugitive" I find it so interesting!
oh my god. the suspense. the love. the drama. the heartbreak. i love it and hate it (in a 'it's such a jaw-dropping, unfortunate twist' kind of way.. if that makes any sense). i liked the use of diffferent perspectives again here. it added alot of depth and clarity to the situation and the characters themselves. you've got me hooked and on the edge of my seat. can't wait to see her response when she's lucid. :)