Conspiracy - Comments

The layout was simple, but it was pretty cute.
I love your imagery, it was like watching a little movie in my head c:
It was an amazing piece of writing, keep it up :D

Okay, so, as always, your layouts are freakin' gorgeous. They're simple and they match with the picture, which is really nice (: Anyways, I love this so much. I have no criticism at all about it; it's perfect. You get me every time with the details. They're so gorgeous, especially this: She had come to realise, that as wondrously powerful as these days seemed to her, they sat ill of ease with most. It sounds so graceful and beautiful. You definitely have a way with words :D As of now, I'm captivated by this and am dying to read more. Please update soon?
Subbing <3

The one thing that has a tendency to bother me with most stories is the first sentence, and I talk about this all the time.

Everyone spends forever on the first sentence, coming up with something beautiful, that glows with talent. The thing about that sentence? It's a big fat lie. Your entire story is not going to go something along the lines of:

An oily glaze illuminated the pearl surface, it graceful glow gave off its' position to the world.

No. Just no. I would never read a story that starts like that, one of my favourite books Born to Rock by Gordon Korman. The first sentence is about a strip check. HELLO! That grabbed my attention. ;D

Anyways, your story stayed real. And true. It was honest with the first sentence, the rest of the story matched it. Make sense? It was consistent.

The layout is super good, I love orange.

I like the idea, I'm not good with history so I don't exactly know what 'A.D' means, but I think it means After Death?

In summary it's really great, and I'm excited. :D

I really liked this prologue. It had detail in it and grabbed my attention quickly! I think that at the end of paragraph one your sentences were slightly too long, or at least, you were trying to cram too much detail into one sentence. This made me lose you slightly but I know it's easy to fix. The story itself is attention grabbing and makes me want to know more, so far the descriptions of your hometown are not vague.
I can't wait to see where this goes! :D

Whoa! There's so much description; the layout lends very well to it. I love the way you manage to flow right from a moment in her life to a intro to the story itself.
The story itself sounds very intriguing; I can't say much without knowing more, but I know I want to know more, so I'm definitely subbing xD

This is an epic prologue. No kidding. When it starts off, it seems almost light and happy. I think the layout contributes to that. In such a short time, you've crammed in so much wonderful detail and description. You're making me want to read more, so I'm going to.

had been what had drawn her there.

This part in the first line just didn't sit well with me; having the word 'had' twice so close together.

Other than that, great job!