A Story From Afar - Comments

awww, thank you for your...intresting commets, I shall put them to good use :) x

chapter 3 has been the best one yet :) its clear, you can feel what the characters are feeling its really good. but weher it says "The elf was nothing above five, and lay still beneath the small blanket"... five what? foot, stone, years old? :P get my point? obvioulsy don't go over explaining everything though :) x

chapter 2! less confusing than the first so well done :) it was easier to imagine what was going on as well, still some parts that need more explaining,or re-writting, i think some of it is.. no offence, the grammar, it confuses my simple mind :) still its really good and yet again i'll go read chapter three and leave some "comment cookies" x

okay chapter one definetly needs something to really explain the story, cos the whole thing is a mystery and very confusing. its beautifly written, but just so confusing. erm definetly i'd definetly 1450th up that 1450, cos that left me confused for several minutes :) otherwise its really good :) i'll do another one like this when i read chapter two through again. x

yay, thanks, third chapter shall contain hopefully none, its going to be an intresting one :) xx

I like it, still a few mistakes but you're getting better. Can't wait for the next chapter :) xx

Yeah, i'd agree thanks :)

Good start, needs a bit of work with grammar and spelling but apart from that it's really good :) xx