No Time To Bleed - Comments

I knew it! Lol jesse's back. No foursome

jskars (Whisper: It's a secret!)

Those two chapters just made me hella excited for the sequel.

I've only gotten through the first three chapters, but I like it a lot so far. Can't wait to get caught up.

Grammar's a bit shaky in some parts, but it's just misplaced apostrophes, a few shifty commas - nothing distracting. Nice work.

You just had to kill Eli. Smh

so... reagan= psycho, creepy freak
kevin= even bigger psycho, creappy freak
and louis= THE BIGGEST (caps and all) PSYCHO,CREEPY MO FO EVER!!!!

and now i kinda feel bad for aliah... she may be awful, but she doesn't deserve to live or die like that... no one does. and poor ELI!!!!! how he keeps thinking that Kevin is still his friend... the murphy parents seem to just be annoyances more than anything else... and reagan is NASTY!!!!!! but on the plus side alex is still completely adorablw with his thing for jasmine.. just thought i'd mention that.

I probably would've puked if Reagan kissed me. rotfl

I HATE YOU! I HATE YOU! I HATE YOU! :P What is up with Louis, he's not a normal boy?

Ryant you are so evil. Lol I know the crazed family either cooked Aliah or fed her to the zombies.

Haha I just read the entire story in like an hour! It was that good!! Lol
I was soooo grossed out about the dog part with Eli. Ewrkk!

I'm so excited to see what's on the bridge!

This chapter was okay! And i was wondering where aliah had gone.

Alex is Jasmine's protector! lol All Eli has to do is take that brick &beat Kevin in the head. Just saying.

i still don't like aliah and i'm with jskars... they should've let her die... but i like how jasmine and alex's relationship is developing... it's cute.

kevin is CREEPY!!!! i already have a slight fear of little kids and this doesn't help AT ALL!!! i just realy hope that Eli makes it out okay and they all leave soon so they can just deal with their own insanity rather than try to sort their way through these other's people's (who at this point aren't insane, but PSYCHOTIC!!!!!!!!!!![with the capital letters and exclamation points and everything!!!])

Aw, Alex loves me. Lol

Lol Uncle Meg, that shit was hilarious XD If I were Alex, I would have let Aliah's dumbass become the zombie girls lunch.

Also, You tend to switch to 3rd person randomly, when you're story looks more oriented towards 1st person. Please correct that.. ^^'

Whoa! Aliah hold your horses, Alex is mine :P

Lol, you guys are awesome!
zazoo- I practically sweated like hell trying to comb through the POV mistakes in the beginning. My mind must've been wired weirdly when I wrote those chapters or something or my fingers just move faster than my brain. And thanks SOOO much for reading, I really appreciate the comment.

jazzy512- Aliah is definitely a character. She's either gonna have a lot to learn or end up.... I cant say! (seals lips)

Hey I just wanted to say, I love your story already, and I'm in the middle of the second chapter, but I got a few things you might wanna look at.

First chapter: Several refrences to "she" when Jasmine was the only female in that scene. Ex: Scene with the guy asking Jasmine to go out with him.

Second Chapter: Half of the chapter referred Aunt Meg as "Uncle Meg" lol!!

:P

so i'm definitely with jasmine on this one, i don't care how you try and make what she said okay, aliah is a (pardon my french... but...) fucking bitch that if there is a hell in this story i hope she burns in, and i can't wait til jasmine gets rid of her... dumb bitch her father's views and hers can and are different... she meant what she said and if she isn't big enough to have someone closer to her age stand up to her about it then she needs to learn to shut her fat ass mouth...bitch... oh and did i mention she's a bitch. i really hope that she gets killed off, but her baby should live cuz he or she shouldn't have to suffer just because his or her mom is a dumbass bitch. just saying.