I enjoyed reading this, it was sweat, but it was also rather sloppy and I didn’t think much of the main character.
The chapters didn’t really seem like chapters. It would perhaps have been better off as just being one section (with breaks where time moves on) but I’m not sure that would work on this site as you’d either have to put it all up at once or keep editing the same ‘chapter’ to put up more and it probably wouldn’t put send out notifications to subscribers.
Anyway, keep up the good work, it was well written.
The chapters didn’t really seem like chapters. It would perhaps have been better off as just being one section (with breaks where time moves on) but I’m not sure that would work on this site as you’d either have to put it all up at once or keep editing the same ‘chapter’ to put up more and it probably wouldn’t put send out notifications to subscribers.
Anyway, keep up the good work, it was well written.