I think it's nice to see how Jared's thinking, but just repeating the whole chapter from his point of view, and doing it often, is getting too repetitive. Perhaps just switch POV's halfway through if there's a specific emotion you really want to convey that the other person is having, instead of completely repeating the whole chapter. Just a thought. I pretty much skipped the long chapter.... Sorry, it's probably not the kind of comment you want, but that's just how I felt.
This story is love. I'm so excited for m&j to see each other again, as I feel something could possibly happen between them again! This is just so brilliant. Update when you can! <3
*cheers* Thankies to all three of you who commented today/last night. I love getting on here and seeing all the nice things you all say. More updates coming soon. I've got a busy day tomorrow, but I"m hoping to squeeze one update in.:) *fingers crossed* Hope it works out!
You are doing a really amazing job on this story! This chapter was written so perfectly and I enjoyed every second of reading it. I really don't have anything else to say. I'm just glad they've made up. Update again soon! Please!
I loved the updates! I'm so glad that they patched things up. Even if Jared only sees fun with her with trhem on tour I can think that new frustrations could arise. I'm looking foreward to your next update
Loved it. You really picked the perfect lyrics to match his emotions. It was just wonderful. I'm super glad that he decided to go and talk to her; I really can't wait to see how that plays out. Glad you updated and I hope you do again soon :) Sorry I don't have much to say on this one, it was just awesome
I'm very disappointed in Jared not talking about it with her :( But nonetheless, I'm excited to see how they deal with it and what else happens. I hope he just comes around and makes it up to her. I liked the ending of the chapter. We got to see inside her head and get a bit of her past and it was good, nicely written too. Over all, cool update and I'm looking forward to the next one :)
Loved the update. I'm a little disappointed in Jared for not talking things over with her, but I can understand the.strangeness that they are both feeling. I'm looking forward to see how they are going to deal with the situation